Zucca Xerfantes true, but couldn't whatever attacked him just hurt him more? I don't remember what happens in this story, so... XD Plus, I think anybody who had their throat slashed would want to die as soon as possible. The pain would be unbearable. I mean, some people can, though. One mom cut herself open and retrieved her own child. I don't quite remember if she sewed herself up, though, I just remembered she survived and seemed happy. So, it's possible, but if I was in that situation I would just want to die. Plus, the shock could also make him pass out. I'm so looking too far into this XD
my favorite part of this pasta is it is a perfect example of how our brain makes stories. Our brains love hearing stories and they'll turn anything, even a few dots moving around into a story. Thus why he felt uneasy about a harmless dot touching another dot.
I really liked that one up until the end. I never understood how someone can write a creepypasta in first person, as if someone is recollecting this experience to you, and then have that person die. It just doesn't make much sense and kind of killed it for me, so to speak. But other than that, I really liked that one.
Jesse Cross Heh, well I suppose that could be. But for me that makes the story a little cheesy and less to my liking. But other than the ending I did quite like it.
Proctra & Starlight Meh, If I spoiled it to anybody, they shouldn't have been reading the comments anyway. It was replying to someone talking about the end anyway...
I know but endings where the narrator dies just sucks all of the mystery out of the story in general. but I guess its how the writer wanted it so, i suppose I can't complain.
[SPOILERS] This story had so much potential that I was going to overlook the fact the writer just found a way around the generic "how can I say I got the game for free, without saying I got the game for free?" But then it was just another mysterious game that kills people which somehow is written about in first person despite the writer being dead, then I got sad.
It was a bit different in this case though. He collected obscure old games, and this just happened to be one of them. He wasn't an adult going to buy an old game to appeal to his nostalgia then got sold the game in a mysterious way for free and never saw the (probably) old man that gave it to him. Also, the game starts off normal and gradually gets creepier, whereas in most crappy videogame pastas there's some flash of "hyper-realistic blood" at the beginning or something.
Not only did I tag in with full, block capitals that it was a spoiler, but you had to click the button to see more, you deserve everything that comes to you. You're welcome.
Bunni Step Exactly! It's like sticking a CONFIRMED FAKE badge right on the story. Whether the story is clearly fake or not, there always should be room for possibility with creepy pastas. That's mostly what makes them creepy.
***** I guess it didn't directly state that the narrator died because im sure there are cases of someone getting there throat slit and surviving, but there's a really slim possibility of that too.
Bunni Step But we probably would have heard about someone in this situation getting their throat slit and living on the news before hearing about in a "this really weird thing just happened to me" story on the internet.
***** And that's where the fourth wall breaks. So lesson learned: scary stories are great until you put yourself into it, make yourself the main character, then say "I died." x) Regardless of the ending and point of view, it was a rad story.
I was listening to this in the dark with the volume up. His voice is so soothing I was actually beginning to drift off. Then, an ad played and it scared the living shit out of me.
I tried listening to this about 7 times last night but fell asleep every time. I kept rewinding it back to the part I fell asleep but in the end I gave up 😅 I always fall asleep to these types of videos, I put one on every night to go to sleep but I was actually trying to listen to this, so I've come back today through the day. I feel you on the just about to drop off and an ad startles the shit outta you aswell
I’m not sure if it was he fact that the video corresponded with the story, or the additional sound effects but this was INCREDIBLY immersive! You’re probably not going to read this but I’ll not soon forget this one. One of your best ones to date!
Ash kinkaid I get the feeling a lot of these haunted video game stories are written by people who didn't actually use the technology when it first came out, maybe. It's little things like that can really break a good story for me.
I still enjoy them, but the one thing I hate about gaming pastas is how the players just KEEP PLAYING the damn thing! When he got the text message I would have unplugged and taken the whole thing, monitor and all, to the highest ceiling I got get to and drop it. Then I would go down and set fire to the remains, then spread whatever was left at the next few towns or something. XD
I don't know why I do it but every night around 12 or 1 I listen to a few creepypastas in total darkness and freak out over the slightest noise in the house, could be the cat scratching the recliner or the heat turning on but it always sounds like something is in the house with me. I guess it doesn't help that I'm a paranoid schizophrenic with anxiety and high blood pressure but it's my routine.
To the people complaining about the ending Spoilers You can survive having your throat slit, being shot in the head, losing limbs, all that. Who's to say that the author didn't just get his throat slit, call 911, and survive? And yeah, some of you might argue about it being a "deep gash" But a he mentions nothing of losing the ability to breath or drowning in blood. Coming from someone who's had their stomach cut open extremely deeply and someone who isn't a cry baby, there are absurd injuries that you can survive that a lot of these creepypasta's end with but people still claim the author died.
I must have a good mind because when I got to the level 11 part I was predicting it to be his house's floorplan and I was half right because it was a floorplan, just not his, it was his stepfather's.
its creepy pastas like this that ruin the moment with the ending. "OH MY GOD HE KILLED ME SO I COULDN'T POSSIBLY BE TYPING THIS, BUT FUCK PHYSICS ANYWAY."
I just realized the creepy ambient noise is the old dial up sound slowed down to like 1% of normal speed. Or at least I'm fairly certain. Creepypastas make the imagination run
+Christian Hettick Actually it doesn't seem to bother me. Although I do kinda like those older creepy stories where one or two people survive but most of the rest die.
Any pasta that's told from a first person perspective and has the narrator die with out explicitly saying that it was recorded is just bullshit. You build all this shit up for it to be told by a dead man? There are certain allowances we give these creepy pastas. We can let imaginary creatures exist in our minds for a bit, we can allow for the character to spit in the face of modern logic, we can even forgive a lack of normal life like interaction between characters, as long as it helps move the story along. But when a fucking FIRST PERSON POV STORY ENDS WITH THE NARRATOR BEING KILLED, THE WHOLE THING IMPLODES ON IT'S SELF! Think about it like this. Go through a day in your life right now. Then die. Are you going to be able to relate that story? FUCK NO, YOU'RE DEAD! That's the same with this. It was never said the character was a ghost/spirit. It never said there was a recording of these events. It never said anything to the fact that there was any way the narrator passed this information along. THEN HOW DO WE HAVE A BLOW BY BLOW ACCOUNT IN THE FIRST PERSON? It is one thing to forgive the fact that the premises for the pasta was weak. But to end it like that is to spit in a logical person's face.
Perhaps they died, and now are talking to themselves as a spirit or whatever, or to someone else (who is also a spirit) to recap what happened. Who cares..
You clearly have no concept of good storytelling tactics. The story is told in a way that the listener can imagine themselves in the narrator's place. you only perceive what they themself saw, heard and felt during the course of the story, thus the things that it doesn't tell you, it allows your imagination to fill in the gaps so that each person's experience is different. the supposed monster isn't labeled as any particular kind of being or apparition, so it leaves you to decide what it may look like, and how it kills its victims, though ultimately, your own death is given to you on a plate since you would know if someone slit your throat open.
Miss Phoenix I dont really care, personally. Yea the author could have left like " Im writing this, its still behind me" but honestly it doesnt matter. They're just stories.
I love listening to your works. Your voice is soothing and helps give life to the stories. I can sink hours into your channel. Even while playing World of Warcraft, I keep you up in the background. Keep up the wonderful work, Creeps :3
I stood in shock as he came dancing towards me... His hair was peppermint green, his skin a florescent orange his clothes a horrific shade of purple... "don't eat the candy" he screamed before he blinked, smilied and started d chanting "Ompa... lompa... do..be...do...die" Better? no red at all hehe
The mahogany-skinned creature rushed towards me, cornering me in the magenta room. Loud, droning music pulsated like blood through my ears, drowning out even my dehydrated gasps. Through the acidic tears, I read the monster's curled, maroon lips. "You gonna learn today." - BETTER ENOUGH?
He came at me with his knife, his white skin gleaming. The silver knife nearly cut me, but it thankfully missed. I saw a crowbar near me, and wondered if I'd be able to get to it before he gets to me. His wide smile grew wider, as he went in for the kill... That was not Jeff the Killer. That creepypasta is shit. I'll give you 2 hints. Green hair, purple clothes.
Call me old-fashioned and unoriginal, but this was by far one of the BEST stories I've had the privilege of hearing from you! And a creepy one at that! :00
Whoever cut the throat needs to get more practice if he survived long enough to write an entire damn story, save it, send it out to the internet and what-so-ever.
Jude Maxwell Its also another problem if they decided to not make the cosmic horror go away from them... I mean, COME ON. Also cosmic horrors need to up that sneak skill, even that casual could find them.
(SPOILER) I realize what was happening when he said one of them was cleaved in half, and then I guessed "He's going to die, isn't he?" looks like I'm a psychic :D
This creepy past is especially scary for me as I recently received an old mac with loads of game. I'm actually doing a 'let's play' of all the games on my channel if anyone's interested. It would be a bit messed up if
As much as I would love that, it won't happen, because of all the crap he got for his other Pony based-creepypastas. Anti-bronies tend to make a mess of anything involving ponies.
To make it even more eerie, halfway through the video, THERE WAS THIS VERY LOUD THUNDER-CLAP! It sounded like a canon firing! I knew it had been thunderstorming BUT I DIDN'T EXPECT THAT LOUD ONE!
Out, damn spot, OUT! But, It's... YOU. I love this little story, so much. Also, the play along aspect, was such* a fun treat;) And, as always, the narration is beautiful🖤!
Story was good, until the cellphone message from the mom which sounded like a very unrealistic way of reacting to the death of her husband; it fell apart from there. A tip for the writer: First Person stories that end with the death of the protagonist can really kill (pun intended) the credibility of the story.
This is it! We've got it! That's how you write a creepypasta! Keep things subtle! Keep them on a good growing pace and tone! Keep the narrator relatable!! Just don't copy the ending, it's all too common.
I really enjoyed being able to watch what was happening within the story. I was expecting a jump scare at the end but thankfully not. it was amazing :) thank you :)
Having grown up in the early 80s, I used floppy disks, had a pc with a MASSIVE 4 Megabyte Hard Drive, ran old DOS games like Castle (you play as a character...not a person but a LITERAL singel digit of a character and explored an alphanumeric castle). I also grew up with Atari, NES, Pong, etc. Man, games took a bit of imagination to play back then but it made me a more creative person...
You know, after the first one moved, I'd have tested it further. Break down other "walls", walk away and see if the blue dot came back out or something...just to see how it would play out.
this was so well done !! right up until the end. I can't stand endings where the narrator winds up dying or it's played off as if they did. it jolts one out of the illusion and completely ruins the interpersonal, immersive quality a first person perspective is meant to give it. Like, how are you writing the story then, bro. Ominous foreshadowing by the end works better. Like tearing the floppy disk out of the computer and destroying it only to return to the game in and on the very next day. Or at least writing the story in the present tense. "Wait... I just noticed. The layout... it's my apartment" or something. Cutting it off before implied death as if he was writing it as he went THEN the implied death thing works.
There are interesting psychological experiments much like this one. A bunch of random shapes behaving erratically, with very little discernible pattern, and shown to people who are asked to describe what is happening on the screen. Subjects almost always personify the shapes as characters and their movements as human behaviors, describing stories in the movements they see. We have a natural tendency to anthropomorphize objects the movements of which are not otherwise explained. Fascinating stuff.
Tries everything to shut down the computer.
Forgets he can stand up and walk away.
timer thingy remember?
Why not destroy it?
thought provoking quote but I could say why not nurish a gift
why not just take out the floppy disk or CD maybe even cassette
@@puppet4978 thats what i thoght
While the ending was weak, this is a good example of a video game creepypasta done right.
I like bees
Only saw this now: you don't necessarily die with a slashed throath. You do most of the time, but not Always.
@@inserisciunnome judging by context clues of other victims the killer wasnt done there
this was a good creepypasta with a bad ending
splish splash your opinion belongs in the trash
"And then after it slashed my throat I wrote this story and then died the end"
haha 😂😂😂
The exsanguination can be greatly delayed if you smoosh your chin against your chest and breathe shallow!
Zucca Xerfantes true, but couldn't whatever attacked him just hurt him more?
I don't remember what happens in this story, so... XD
Plus, I think anybody who had their throat slashed would want to die as soon as possible. The pain would be unbearable.
I mean, some people can, though. One mom cut herself open and retrieved her own child. I don't quite remember if she sewed herself up, though, I just remembered she survived and seemed happy.
So, it's possible, but if I was in that situation I would just want to die. Plus, the shock could also make him pass out.
I'm so looking too far into this XD
AND THEN YOU BECAME SKELETON AND WROTE THIS!
Kleneu66
And it's fairly apparent this fellow is indeed a college studunt.
my favorite part of this pasta is it is a perfect example of how our brain makes stories. Our brains love hearing stories and they'll turn anything, even a few dots moving around into a story. Thus why he felt uneasy about a harmless dot touching another dot.
I like bees
Me: So... did you die?
Author: Yes, but fortunately... I survived.
I like bees
Did you die?
Sadly yes… but I lived
“… I got better…”
I really liked that one up until the end. I never understood how someone can write a creepypasta in first person, as if someone is recollecting this experience to you, and then have that person die. It just doesn't make much sense and kind of killed it for me, so to speak. But other than that, I really liked that one.
Christopher Beluga maybe his ghost wrote it
Jesse Cross Heh, well I suppose that could be. But for me that makes the story a little cheesy and less to my liking. But other than the ending I did quite like it.
+Christopher Beluga technically you can survive your throat being cut... its just unlikely and needs rapid medical attention
DagasNeedle
Yeah, that's true. But I'm willing to bet that the narrator was supposed to die here, so... I was a little irritated by that.
@@DagasNeedle But not longer than an hour or a day
wow, this story was amazing until the very end line.
well of course the main character had to die, either way it was still amazing.
Glowing
dat spoiler tho
Proctra & Starlight Meh, If I spoiled it to anybody, they shouldn't have been reading the comments anyway. It was replying to someone talking about the end anyway...
I know but endings where the narrator dies just sucks all of the mystery out of the story in general.
but I guess its how the writer wanted it so, i suppose I can't complain.
Cross99obx Who says he died?
"deep red floppy disc" whatever, anyone who grew up in the early 90s knows thats just a copy of doom
I’m listening to this and playing doom 64
"And then I died -the end" is such a rookie mistake. Otherwise, great pasta.
Don’t know how the author can write this chilling story and then end it like a 3rd graders English project
Ahhhh ...that's why it's cute.
"But I ran and got away, unlike the others, and survived to type this creepypasta". That's ALL you had to say to make this work.
"this story was just a prank lol get owned" works aswell
Or he moved it to the other end and then waited for the time to run out.
i duuno if anyone mentioned it, but "Toter" means a deadman ^^
so its Deadman's maze
scarlettthedragoneye in which language?
No, Mörder means killer, töter would be something a 3 year old would say.
@@He1989Ba German.
Toter is a Dead, yes, but standing alone like this it's a grammar nightmare. xD
[SPOILERS]
This story had so much potential that I was going to overlook the fact the writer just found a way around the generic "how can I say I got the game for free, without saying I got the game for free?"
But then it was just another mysterious game that kills people which somehow is written about in first person despite the writer being dead, then I got sad.
It was a bit different in this case though. He collected obscure old games, and this just happened to be one of them. He wasn't an adult going to buy an old game to appeal to his nostalgia then got sold the game in a mysterious way for free and never saw the (probably) old man that gave it to him.
Also, the game starts off normal and gradually gets creepier, whereas in most crappy videogame pastas there's some flash of "hyper-realistic blood" at the beginning or something.
Thanks for spoiling it.
Not only did I tag in with full, block capitals that it was a spoiler, but you had to click the button to see more, you deserve everything that comes to you.
You're welcome.
Woops, wrong comment, sorry
In which case I apologise for being rude.
The idea was great, but whenever a story ends with the FPP narrator dying, it just kills the whole thing -_-
***** Yeah, how did he die if he's telling the story...? :T
Bunni Step Exactly! It's like sticking a CONFIRMED FAKE badge right on the story. Whether the story is clearly fake or not, there always should be room for possibility with creepy pastas. That's mostly what makes them creepy.
***** I guess it didn't directly state that the narrator died because im sure there are cases of someone getting there throat slit and surviving, but there's a really slim possibility of that too.
Bunni Step But we probably would have heard about someone in this situation getting their throat slit and living on the news before hearing about in a "this really weird thing just happened to me" story on the internet.
***** And that's where the fourth wall breaks. So lesson learned: scary stories are great until you put yourself into it, make yourself the main character, then say "I died." x) Regardless of the ending and point of view, it was a rad story.
I love when the video goes along with the narration.
yaaass
Good thing the game he found wasn't Tim Tim Time Man.
Don't scare me man! You _KNOW_ I scare easily D':
Whats tim tim time man?
CreepsMcPasta Creeps....Y U NO ACCEPT BLOOD BUCKET CHALLENGE?!
The Obsurver I believe it is on his Play channel.
What?
He typed this while he writhed in pain, choking on his own blood. What a man👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾
I was listening to this in the dark with the volume up. His voice is so soothing I was actually beginning to drift off.
Then, an ad played and it scared the living shit out of me.
I tried listening to this about 7 times last night but fell asleep every time. I kept rewinding it back to the part I fell asleep but in the end I gave up 😅 I always fall asleep to these types of videos, I put one on every night to go to sleep but I was actually trying to listen to this, so I've come back today through the day. I feel you on the just about to drop off and an ad startles the shit outta you aswell
happens to me all the time!
I’m not sure if it was he fact that the video corresponded with the story, or the additional sound effects but this was INCREDIBLY immersive! You’re probably not going to read this but I’ll not soon forget this one. One of your best ones to date!
Loveeee the visuals in this one, makes it seem more real
itsoliviarose love your pic in this one, makes beauty in this world much more vivid.
24:22 imagine being the blue dot and then you randomly hear some dude zipping around your house like Sonic
...and then I died, but still was anomalously able to finish my narrative, even though the need to do so had probably dissipated 5 minutes ago. :p
I love the fact that he used a slowed down version of the dial-up sound as ambiance
I like bees
The main thing that I find implausible is his mother text messaging him about something so serious. Wouldn't she call if it was such an emergency?
SpiritStasis I know the feeling! (:
SpiritStasis You can't send a text message when you have no reception.
Don't forget the old pc running an ancient OS but able to plug it in to his flat screen, someone didn't grow up with vga graphics.
staley101 good point!
Ash kinkaid I get the feeling a lot of these haunted video game stories are written by people who didn't actually use the technology when it first came out, maybe. It's little things like that can really break a good story for me.
I still enjoy them, but the one thing I hate about gaming pastas is how the players just KEEP PLAYING the damn thing! When he got the text message I would have unplugged and taken the whole thing, monitor and all, to the highest ceiling I got get to and drop it. Then I would go down and set fire to the remains, then spread whatever was left at the next few towns or something. XD
Who knew dots could creep you out?
So, this ends, and immediately afterward, happy music in an ad for South Africa travels starts XD
*gets throat slit*
“Grh!... BllAh..... Bleeding... COUGH.... out.... Gotta... write... story.... COUGH!!”
Psh, I wouldda pulled the plug when he didn't, and If the game was still on the screen? *raises hammer*
You ever seen a dot die, kid?
You .... Ur .... You're great lol
Liquid Dinosaur oh man it changes you
I absolutely love that you made a video for this.
Next Creepypasta- "Satellite Images" Creepypasta
yay, more nightmares
AND IN ORDER
Favorite creepypasta yet!!!
+CreepsMcPasta hope you hit one million soon keep up the good work
+fam 1u (fam 1u born to game)
that's not even scary, dude
+CreepsMcPasta bbest creepypasta of 2016
SHIT!
As soon as the face popped up on he video, my screen lost power.
I need a new pair of pants...
Absolutely love the visuals in this one! ♡
I don't know why I do it but every night around 12 or 1 I listen to a few creepypastas in total darkness and freak out over the slightest noise in the house, could be the cat scratching the recliner or the heat turning on but it always sounds like something is in the house with me. I guess it doesn't help that I'm a paranoid schizophrenic with anxiety and high blood pressure but it's my routine.
2:38 *SUSman*
That Final Level twist... XD
Could be worse. He could have met the hash slinging slasher
Wow. This was a great one. The only thing I didn't like was the ending. But, it's a great creepypasta.
4:56 Things are shaping up to be pRETTY ODD!
my theory
after he died his soul got caught in the game and so he typed it up on the same computer that he died in front of.
To the people complaining about the ending
Spoilers
You can survive having your throat slit, being shot in the head, losing limbs, all that. Who's to say that the author didn't just get his throat slit, call 911, and survive? And yeah, some of you might argue about it being a "deep gash" But a he mentions nothing of losing the ability to breath or drowning in blood. Coming from someone who's had their stomach cut open extremely deeply and someone who isn't a cry baby, there are absurd injuries that you can survive that a lot of these creepypasta's end with but people still claim the author died.
a Gnasher because that's far more convenience than I'm willing to afford the story
I must have a good mind because when I got to the level 11 part I was predicting it to be his house's floorplan and I was half right because it was a floorplan, just not his, it was his stepfather's.
its creepy pastas like this that ruin the moment with the ending. "OH MY GOD HE KILLED ME SO I COULDN'T POSSIBLY BE TYPING THIS, BUT FUCK PHYSICS ANYWAY."
Maybe he's telling the story as it's happenings
I just realized the creepy ambient noise is the old dial up sound slowed down to like 1% of normal speed. Or at least I'm fairly certain. Creepypastas make the imagination run
o ok so you died then decided to type up this story makes sense :|
+Christian Hettick I thought everyone writes about how they die after they die...
Manta Genus so many stories ruined by the writer dying
Oh yeah, ruins the best stories also.
Manta Genus no so far i haven't seen any really good stories ruined by it but still
+Christian Hettick
Actually it doesn't seem to bother me.
Although I do kinda like those older creepy stories where one or two people survive but most of the rest die.
The editing on this video was great, really showing as close as possible to what the creepypasta was saying
Any pasta that's told from a first person perspective and has the narrator die with out explicitly saying that it was recorded is just bullshit. You build all this shit up for it to be told by a dead man? There are certain allowances we give these creepy pastas. We can let imaginary creatures exist in our minds for a bit, we can allow for the character to spit in the face of modern logic, we can even forgive a lack of normal life like interaction between characters, as long as it helps move the story along. But when a fucking FIRST PERSON POV STORY ENDS WITH THE NARRATOR BEING KILLED, THE WHOLE THING IMPLODES ON IT'S SELF!
Think about it like this. Go through a day in your life right now. Then die. Are you going to be able to relate that story? FUCK NO, YOU'RE DEAD! That's the same with this. It was never said the character was a ghost/spirit. It never said there was a recording of these events. It never said anything to the fact that there was any way the narrator passed this information along. THEN HOW DO WE HAVE A BLOW BY BLOW ACCOUNT IN THE FIRST PERSON?
It is one thing to forgive the fact that the premises for the pasta was weak. But to end it like that is to spit in a logical person's face.
Perhaps they died, and now are talking to themselves as a spirit or whatever, or to someone else (who is also a spirit) to recap what happened. Who cares..
You clearly have no concept of good storytelling tactics. The story is told in a way that the listener can imagine themselves in the narrator's place. you only perceive what they themself saw, heard and felt during the course of the story, thus the things that it doesn't tell you, it allows your imagination to fill in the gaps so that each person's experience is different. the supposed monster isn't labeled as any particular kind of being or apparition, so it leaves you to decide what it may look like, and how it kills its victims, though ultimately, your own death is given to you on a plate since you would know if someone slit your throat open.
Miss Phoenix I dont really care, personally. Yea the author could have left like " Im writing this, its still behind me" but honestly it doesnt matter. They're just stories.
And I'm assuming the three of you above me thought Jeff the Killer and Dead Bart were golden examples of story telling.
Telos954x I've never read either of those personally. I just think you need to stop critisizing Creeps for choosing to read this story.
I love listening to your works. Your voice is soothing and helps give life to the stories. I can sink hours into your channel. Even while playing World of Warcraft, I keep you up in the background. Keep up the wonderful work, Creeps :3
Why must every creepypasta item be "deep red" or color with "sickly" as an adjective. Why they be something like shocking pink or evergreen? lol
I stood in shock as he came dancing towards me... His hair was peppermint green, his skin a florescent orange his clothes a horrific shade of purple... "don't eat the candy" he screamed before he blinked, smilied and started d chanting "Ompa... lompa... do..be...do...die"
Better? no red at all hehe
The mahogany-skinned creature rushed towards me, cornering me in the magenta room. Loud, droning music pulsated like blood through my ears, drowning out even my dehydrated gasps. Through the acidic tears, I read the monster's curled, maroon lips.
"You gonna learn today."
-
BETTER ENOUGH?
He came at me with his knife, his white skin gleaming. The silver knife nearly cut me, but it thankfully missed. I saw a crowbar near me, and wondered if I'd be able to get to it before he gets to me. His wide smile grew wider, as he went in for the kill...
That was not Jeff the Killer. That creepypasta is shit. I'll give you 2 hints. Green hair, purple clothes.
I looked back,there was an Orange coloured Demon which Purple fingers and Grey Legs,I ran away but it started to shoot Yellow Fireballs
@@ninjagator1183 da jokah?
I know this is super old but I love the visuals you added!! They make it so much easier for me to understand what’s going on lol
How would he be able to say this story if he is dead.
"Then I felt a warm gash across my thought"
Wtf get it right please
Are you kidding with that remark???? Do you not really listen to all the stories? Jeez
Call me old-fashioned and unoriginal, but this was by far one of the BEST stories I've had the privilege of hearing from you! And a creepy one at that! :00
So how would he be able to write it if his throat was cut?
***** Heh...I'm dumb :P
***** how would you know that is there a sequal to this?
Whoever cut the throat needs to get more practice if he survived long enough to write an entire damn story, save it, send it out to the internet and what-so-ever.
HawaiianJon i know right youd think computer based cosmic horrors would be a bit more pecise
Jude Maxwell Its also another problem if they decided to not make the cosmic horror go away from them... I mean, COME ON.
Also cosmic horrors need to up that sneak skill, even that casual could find them.
1:30 I remember! I remember the ZIP disc! If Iomega had better quality control, we might be using their successors today. :\
Susman? Sus?! Amogus?
Creeps, your soothing voice and video are quite literally staving off my depression. Thank you for the content, I owe you♡♡♡
You know what's creepy besides pasta?
Porn
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
You need some MILLLLLLLLLK
*Not trying to be rude*
Porn is many things, and creepy is definitely one of them.
Hollow Tim right*
Let's get HORNY
this is the best pasta video iv watched in a wile! the editing made it so much better.
(SPOILER)
I realize what was happening when he said one of them was cleaved in half, and then I guessed "He's going to die, isn't he?" looks like I'm a psychic :D
Ha I guessed the exact same thing.
The idea of digging into old towers is fascinating because you never know...but, HAHA! dotting the I’s and crossing T’s! Great job!
S u s m a n
Lmao “and then I died. The end.”
The views are going up fast
This creepy past is especially scary for me as I recently received an old mac with loads of game. I'm actually doing a 'let's play' of all the games on my channel if anyone's interested. It would be a bit messed up if
have you ever heard about
"The Experiments of Twilight Sparkle"?
its more worse then "Cupcakes"
and if you do do it...
THANK YOU
As much as I would love that, it won't happen, because of all the crap he got for his other Pony based-creepypastas. Anti-bronies tend to make a mess of anything involving ponies.
HYPER-REALISTIC BLOOD!!!
CATHULHU Oh god not the hyper-realistic card XD
***** I doubt you speak for everyone
***** But not everyone.
This creepypasta scared me REAL good. Nice job!
Third nevermind fouth... :(
third is the one with a treasure chest...
4th is the one with the hairy chest
To make it even more eerie, halfway through the video, THERE WAS THIS VERY LOUD THUNDER-CLAP! It sounded like a canon firing! I knew it had been thunderstorming BUT I DIDN'T EXPECT THAT LOUD ONE!
darude-sandstorm
sorry
Dom Levy You should be.
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That's pretty funny.
Hey-No one cares
That was an incredible story, truly unnerved me.
Out, damn spot, OUT! But, It's... YOU.
I love this little story, so much. Also, the play along aspect, was such* a fun treat;) And, as always, the narration is
beautiful🖤!
"Then something hard as bone, warm and sharp cut my throat" When the you run out of coke bottles to cut with your one thousand degree knife.
Sorry added an extra the there
Story was good, until the cellphone message from the mom which sounded like a very unrealistic way of reacting to the death of her husband; it fell apart from there. A tip for the writer: First Person stories that end with the death of the protagonist can really kill (pun intended) the credibility of the story.
appreciate the editing here creeps!
I really like the visual aids you've been adding to many of your videos!
Love the slowed down dial up tone you use for background music
is it possible what happened to the narrator also happened to the guy he got the game from?
This is it! We've got it! That's how you write a creepypasta! Keep things subtle! Keep them on a good growing pace and tone! Keep the narrator relatable!! Just don't copy the ending, it's all too common.
I loved watching the video of this! Also it was a great story all together! One of my favorites for sure.
"So yeah i died but then death waited for me to finish the story so i did, then i was allowed to die."
I really enjoyed being able to watch what was happening within the story. I was expecting a jump scare at the end but thankfully not. it was amazing :) thank you :)
It takes real talent to make a red dot scary. Amazing story
This is one of the best gaming pastas I've heard in a while.
You got to tell me your secret to reading so fluently and having such a calm voice 0-0
"By No Strech Of The Imagination Could It Ce Called The Maze" Anything Can Be A Maze Dud Just Like Art And Games
The step-father needed a better architect.
this was great! loved the visuals
bro this one send legit shivers down my spine ngl
...halfway through my video thing crashed and said an error occurred... AND NOW I’M GONNA BURN MY COMPUTER
Did anyone else bust out laughing at 19:11? No? Just me? Ok ._.
I did :P
Having grown up in the early 80s, I used floppy disks, had a pc with a MASSIVE 4 Megabyte Hard Drive, ran old DOS games like Castle (you play as a character...not a person but a LITERAL singel digit of a character and explored an alphanumeric castle). I also grew up with Atari, NES, Pong, etc.
Man, games took a bit of imagination to play back then but it made me a more creative person...
You know, after the first one moved, I'd have tested it further. Break down other "walls", walk away and see if the blue dot came back out or something...just to see how it would play out.
Also the whole "it kills people o no" thing was kind of predictable after it talked about the floor plans and stuff.
this was so well done !! right up until the end. I can't stand endings where the narrator winds up dying or it's played off as if they did.
it jolts one out of the illusion and completely ruins the interpersonal, immersive quality a first person perspective is meant to give it.
Like, how are you writing the story then, bro.
Ominous foreshadowing by the end works better.
Like tearing the floppy disk out of the computer and destroying it only to return to the game in and on the very next day.
Or at least writing the story in the present tense. "Wait... I just noticed. The layout... it's my apartment" or something. Cutting it off before implied death as if he was writing it as he went
THEN the implied death thing works.
There are interesting psychological experiments much like this one. A bunch of random shapes behaving erratically, with very little discernible pattern, and shown to people who are asked to describe what is happening on the screen. Subjects almost always personify the shapes as characters and their movements as human behaviors, describing stories in the movements they see. We have a natural tendency to anthropomorphize objects the movements of which are not otherwise explained. Fascinating stuff.
Something I noticed about all your stories after listening for so many years is that you always manage to make the character puke 😂
he doesn't write the stories he finds them on reddit or the creepypasta website and narrates then
i liked the graphics in this one
Best video creeps has ever made
this is so funny because one of my brothers guinea pigs is called token but we call her toters i didnt even know about this story until a few days ago
A computer game can send a spectre to slice people’s throats, but everyone is up in arms that a dead person can write.
Welcome to the internet.