This was the very best I’ve seen in this genre. I Ken’s sense of humor, Rena’s acceptance of him that preceded her standing up for him. I greatly look forward to their further adventures and encourage you to move forward. Although I was initially skeptical of watching it because of its length I ended up wishing it was twice as long. Congratulations on a wonderful winner!
I have read, literally, thousands of stories and maybe listened to a hundred or so of online stories. This story is easily in the top five stories I'v listened to, would have been clearly worth publishing in the Science Fiction Analog magazine. I am attributing the following quote to John W. Campbell, but it seems my memory is actually better than the internet: "I never send out acceptance letters, just checks." Your story is worth a check. That said. I have some critiques, please do not confuse this with criticism. 1, The beginning is a little weak, especially when they first starting talking with each other. This isn't 1960s Star Trek, not everyone in the universe speaks English. One or both of them should have been surprised at the fact that they can communicate. It almost made me turn it off. 2. Once you have hit something three times, move on, stop using "that's impossible" until you hit the next thing that really is supposed to be impossible. 3. In the same vein as 2. after a few times, stop telling us something is humorous. Especially as it is NOT funny to the reader or to many of the NPCs. He is being humorous, she recognizes it, nobody else does. We as readers/listeners do not need to hear "Oh you treat everything as funny." a dozen times. Do not misinterpret, it's OK to use that, but it needs to be clear that he is teaching her humor. There is no reason to believe that she has any idea what a joke is before she met him. I only offer this because I truly liked your story, the premises hearkens me back to a less violent "Midworld" -- Alan Dean Foster This story is great, but it reminds me of why we have editors, and I'm not a terribly good one, be glad my wife isn't responding, she bleeds on EVERYTHING I write, even though I am the better writer.
This is the best story I have had the pleasure of listening to. A roller coaster of humor, emotions, and excitement. I can’t wait for the next chapter. 🏆👏🎊
Your story’s need to made into short movies! Having lost my parents & my wife, I didn’t think I could smile again. Your stories bring a warmth to my heart & a lifting laugh every time I enjoy one of your episodes! Thank You & Happy Thanksgiving to all involved!
Thank you so much for your kind words! I'm thrilled you enjoyed the story and connected with its message about true love. Your support means a lot! I'm happy to share that the continuation of their journey is already in the works-stay tuned for more as their love story unfolds and grows. 😊✨
I agree, I would very much appreciate a part 2. I loved how love is compared to consume. I really want other Earth men to consume some more of the Urza women. Woudl you upvote my comment if you agree that this would be an exciting addition to the already great story?
This was over all a very good story, though it did feel a bit rushed. It could easily be expanded into a full book, giving time for their romance to expand more naturally. It would fit perfectly with most of the books on audible I have listened to.
I hope our heroes in this story never venture to earth. Earth is still savage humans have not learned to get along with each other and stop killing each other in unending wars led by corrupt and evil leaders and politicians. Let our story heroes venture to other planets that really do have intelligent life. 😊😊😊😊
I want to listen to another Chapter. I'm curious how Earth's trees and Vegetation will react to them. They have to go into the Amazon Rain Forest. This story was very very good. I hope to listen to a new Chapter. How do they reproduce?
When words resonate with the good in one’s heart the mind dances. Joyous sounds emanate and offer what may be, what desires to be. Dance, mind! Dance! A willing partner I wish to en-tango If he can accept my hue of blue!
Hmm nothing even mentioned about men or how they have young warriors when they are all women. If i was Ken early on i would have asked about where were the men as they seemed to know about men and very strange how all these words all know english.
why is it that the picture never matches the description that you create in the story might easier if you guys do a cartoon or adult type anime or something
I Really liked this. And, surprisingly, the graphic description and amusing commentary would not have been enhanced ŵith video or pictures. I look forward to future chapters.
This was the very best I’ve seen in this genre. I Ken’s sense of humor, Rena’s acceptance of him that preceded her standing up for him. I greatly look forward to their further adventures and encourage you to move forward. Although I was initially skeptical of watching it because of its length I ended up wishing it was twice as long. Congratulations on a wonderful winner!
I like this story I want to hear more
A surprisingly well written, imaginative, and humorous story. Thanks.
I would love to see this fantastic story continue.
FINALLY theres a new story that isn't just a slight variation of the same story. This one is a great change for once
A part 2 of this would be greatly appreciated
Its always nice when the aliens speak english.
The first ship that landed there was French and their crew did not know English, so they were eaten.
This needs more chapters. An amazing story and so well told. I sincerely would love to see chapter 2... and 3 and more.
Thanks! More soon!
@@SciFiLoreVaultAbsolutely, please and thank you…
More chapters, please!
@@SciFiLoreVaultwait really youre making another part for Ken and Rena?? Tyty
Well I'm pretty sure we need to hear more about these two and there adventure. Please continue this story, it's a great start to a great journey.
I also want them to have a little one
I love to see more also
Yes
I would like to hear more
I could hear a little more.
I have read, literally, thousands of stories and maybe listened to a hundred or so of online stories.
This story is easily in the top five stories I'v listened to, would have been clearly worth publishing in the Science Fiction Analog magazine.
I am attributing the following quote to John W. Campbell, but it seems my memory is actually better than the internet: "I never send out acceptance letters, just checks."
Your story is worth a check.
That said. I have some critiques, please do not confuse this with criticism.
1, The beginning is a little weak, especially when they first starting talking with each other. This isn't 1960s Star Trek, not everyone in the universe speaks English. One or both of them should have been surprised at the fact that they can communicate. It almost made me turn it off.
2. Once you have hit something three times, move on, stop using "that's impossible" until you hit the next thing that really is supposed to be impossible.
3. In the same vein as 2. after a few times, stop telling us something is humorous. Especially as it is NOT funny to the reader or to many of the NPCs. He is being humorous, she recognizes it, nobody else does. We as readers/listeners do not need to hear "Oh you treat everything as funny." a dozen times. Do not misinterpret, it's OK to use that, but it needs to be clear that he is teaching her humor. There is no reason to believe that she has any idea what a joke is before she met him.
I only offer this because I truly liked your story, the premises hearkens me back to a less violent "Midworld" -- Alan Dean Foster
This story is great, but it reminds me of why we have editors, and I'm not a terribly good one, be glad my wife isn't responding, she bleeds on EVERYTHING I write, even though I am the better writer.
Thank you!
@@SciFiLoreVault Sorry about the jumble at the end.... I don't know how my post cut and pated itself, I fixed that.
HOLY GLOWING PLANTS, BATMAN!!!!! PLEASE give us more of this!!! This is the BEST story I have listened to so far!!! THANKS!
This is the best story I have had the pleasure of listening to. A roller coaster of humor, emotions, and excitement. I can’t wait for the next chapter. 🏆👏🎊
Your story’s need to made into short movies! Having lost my parents & my wife, I didn’t think I could smile again. Your stories bring a warmth to my heart & a lifting laugh every time I enjoy one of your episodes! Thank You & Happy Thanksgiving to all involved!
The moss at your feet, it yet glows! Seek my other comment, albeit left to the fates and muses.
please post next part make it 100 hrs long plz
great story, liked and subscribed. I would love to hear more of the adventures
Enjoy listening!
Yes, please provide a sequel/part 2! Excellent story...absolutely enjoyed.
Thanks! Will do!
I would heartily agree that this is one your better ones. Definitely a winner.
Thank you!
Yes... by all means, keep this going. Excellent chemistry
Thank you! Will do!
I loved that story. It shows that Truelove does exist. It would be great to follow the story as there love grows
Thank you so much for your kind words! I'm thrilled you enjoyed the story and connected with its message about true love. Your support means a lot! I'm happy to share that the continuation of their journey is already in the works-stay tuned for more as their love story unfolds and grows. 😊✨
Please please. We all need a part two!
⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
I would absolutely love to listen to those adventures. It would be awesome to hear the continuation of this story❤
Very good story. Well done. More stories of these ladies.
Yes please, let us hear more of their story. 😊
Loved the story!!! ( Please continue)!!!!
Need to hear more of their story !🎉😊
Thanks! coming soon
Excellent story could make a really good movie, I thoroughly enjoyed listening
Great story. I love the ending and hope for more.
This is a great story! I would like to catch a continuation.
Liked and subscribed hope to see a part 2
This is one of the best, maybe the best of all. thanks.
Many many thanks!
please tell us more about these two lovebirds and their adventures
I agree, I would very much appreciate a part 2. I loved how love is compared to consume. I really want other Earth men to consume some more of the Urza women. Woudl you upvote my comment if you agree that this would be an exciting addition to the already great story?
Yes! Thank you!
subbed because i definatly would love more.
Can't wait for part two this was wonderful.
coming soon!
Im a fan the story was intriguing, and the tale telling soothing. Superb i say!!!
Thank you so much!
Please continue with this series.
This felt very good. Thank you 😁 P.S. Yes! More! More Rina and the Cpt.Impossible
Very Good story would love some more episodes.
Well that was wholesome as heck😮
thanks!
if the moss is tripping out when they kiss What do you think will happen to the Moss when they have sex?
Would be great to see more storries and adventures of them
Great story!!!
wonderful! More please.
Thanks!
I’d love to hear more, in this Erza series! 😄
Thanks!
This was over all a very good story, though it did feel a bit rushed. It could easily be expanded into a full book, giving time for their romance to expand more naturally. It would fit perfectly with most of the books on audible I have listened to.
Great job.
You consumed me. Please continue.
If a planet is uncharted and un mapped...how does it have a name? ... did he name it on the way down?
🤣🤣🤣
The humor was impossible , LOL
I would like to hear more of this story.
Outstanding
😂 We need some blue chicks on earth 😂
We’re here!
You've got blue haired ones.
@mark98115 blue haired no good...
BLUE BODIES good.....
Love to hear more 🎉👍🌟💖🇺🇸
Many many thanks
More please!
More please
Id dig a part two
Thank you! coming soon
Part two please😊
coming soon, thanks!
yes part 2
This is a great store WOW
Thanks!
Fantastic
good story.
😢lovely story.. I miss my dead wife ❤
YES!
Make Aliens Edible Again!
U should make movies dude
Thanks!
This is one of the better stories I've had clicked on to. I enjoyed the humor.
Well done, me thinks.
So, his ship suffered from a breach in the hall. I can hardly wait for further developments.
Beautiful story , more is desirable.
Indeed, from front to back, I promise!!
I need more please....
Very good story very Avatarish
I hope our heroes in this story never venture to earth. Earth is still savage humans have not learned to get along with each other and stop killing each other in unending wars led by corrupt and evil leaders and politicians.
Let our story heroes venture to other planets that really do have intelligent life. 😊😊😊😊
What, no air bags? 🤣🤣
I want to listen to another Chapter. I'm curious how Earth's trees and Vegetation will react to them. They have to go into the Amazon Rain Forest.
This story was very very good. I hope to listen to a new Chapter. How do they reproduce?
She Expected Human To Eat Her, But Not Like That.. Not the taco!!!
Thumb nail got me
I would like to hear what they will encounter when they come to earth> i would like to hear more of there story about the people of Uza
The two visiting the various forests of Earth, the Redwoods, the Amazon, the Everglades. The wildlife interacting with them.
When words resonate with the good in one’s heart the mind dances. Joyous sounds emanate and offer what may be, what desires to be. Dance, mind! Dance! A willing partner I wish to en-tango If he can accept my hue of blue!
Great Story but way to many commercials making it a pain to work and listen too.😢
Had to check the comments first to make sure there wasn't a Blue Muffin in there
I agree ❤
I echo the rest of the comments....but the commercials were longer than the story. Way too many
Why do I feel like I’m about to listen to an avatar spoof porn? 😅😂😂
Would be soooo much better with an actual human narrating rather than an AI that continually takes the humanity outa the narrative
Hmm nothing even mentioned about men or how they have young warriors when they are all women. If i was Ken early on i would have asked about where were the men as they seemed to know about men and very strange how all these words all know english.
They would think there is something is wrong with human's .
The title... 😂
why is it that the picture never matches the description that you create in the story might easier if you guys do a cartoon or adult type anime or something
Perhaps there is something out there and maybe how we connect to it is the same way we connect right here
Definitely needs more research purely for scientific purposes of course 😅
😍
Uva buga buga..
AI hands are backwards.
Why is AI so shit at making hands?
99% of the audio books are absolute trash. I'm only a little bit in and am so far impressed by the style.
Thank you!
next is children😄
🎉😂
hottest blue girl ever
Yes it be great to hear more stories about them🎉
I Really liked this. And, surprisingly, the graphic description and amusing commentary would not have been enhanced ŵith video or pictures. I look forward to future chapters.