Nice! There is another story... I think from the 60s where combat had evolved into people beating on each other in mech suits until one person quit. Then there was a guy who... I can't remember if he had a suit and it broke or it malfunctioned or if he just chose not to use one... anyway he entered into the arena with no suit, only had a helmet a net and a hook and won the arena championship or something with his own body instead of the mechanically enhanced one. This then in-turn sparked a change in that arena fighting sport. It was awesome. I can't remember the title because I read it in the 90s. I only remember the cover of the book had a guy with the net, helmet and hook.
The beginning of the story is very repetitive describing how humanity is weak compared to the rest of the universe. You redescribed this weakness 5 times. You continued to reiterate this point again and again throughout the story. I gave up after the second fight. Learn to move on and describe what's going on in the characters or what they see. Maybe the opponents mind, the audients reactions, or the commentators banter. You lack depth in your story telling, it's like watching the old black and white moves with no sound. they were shot in a wide shot with people standing around or moving in the same frame. It tells a story but is boring.
Nice! There is another story... I think from the 60s where combat had evolved into people beating on each other in mech suits until one person quit. Then there was a guy who... I can't remember if he had a suit and it broke or it malfunctioned or if he just chose not to use one... anyway he entered into the arena with no suit, only had a helmet a net and a hook and won the arena championship or something with his own body instead of the mechanically enhanced one. This then in-turn sparked a change in that arena fighting sport. It was awesome. I can't remember the title because I read it in the 90s. I only remember the cover of the book had a guy with the net, helmet and hook.
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The beginning of the story is very repetitive describing how humanity is weak compared to the rest of the universe. You redescribed this weakness 5 times. You continued to reiterate this point again and again throughout the story. I gave up after the second fight. Learn to move on and describe what's going on in the characters or what they see. Maybe the opponents mind, the audients reactions, or the commentators banter. You lack depth in your story telling, it's like watching the old black and white moves with no sound. they were shot in a wide shot with people standing around or moving in the same frame. It tells a story but is boring.
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