3 Ways to Write a Joke from the Seed of the Idea #2

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  • Опубликовано: 30 июл 2024
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    In this video, Jerry Corley discusses 3 different ways to write jokes from the scratch of the idea. How to take an idea, break it down into multiple parts by using the Maxim of the 5W's who, what, where, why, when and how and by also using analogies to introduce a secondary idea.
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  • @josephbarclayross6216
    @josephbarclayross6216 6 лет назад +19

    A lot of old soap opera stars are washed up in Redondo Beach too.

  • @tatemcilwain1775
    @tatemcilwain1775 4 года назад +2

    tanks for making this video. i'm only just starting out with comedy and i'm having a lot of trouble coming up with material, this really pointed me in the right direction

  • @jasonresler
    @jasonresler Год назад +1

    Great stuff Jerry! I can still remember you talking about this process in the car on our run up to Oregon so many years ago. Invaluable advice in the infancy of my career. Those were great times! Good to see you're doing well buddy.

    • @brianmcguire5175
      @brianmcguire5175 Год назад

      He deserves praise. I have commented critique here above but really it's because of his channel and discourse that I feel welcome to contribute to the dialogue. Overall his contribution to teaching the art coupled with his experience in the field is what attracts me to his channel and the comment section. Your comment reminded me to affirm here that I appreciate and am a fan of his work as a teacher and comedic educator that gives me confidence to contribute any point of view expressed above whether critical or otherwise. I love his public offering which sparks healthy debate and research behind joke writing and beyond. I feel I needed to express this here considering I had neglected to show appreciation in former comments

  • @rogerswift1961
    @rogerswift1961 3 года назад +6

    Jerry, you're a bloody genius!

  • @voodooshizzle
    @voodooshizzle 5 лет назад +3

    Thanks, Jerry! Helpful stuff.

  • @josephbarclayross6216
    @josephbarclayross6216 6 лет назад +11

    Thanks, Jerry, with your consummate help I just came up with some great ice-breakers for my next Satanic ritual!

  • @pattystomper1
    @pattystomper1 6 лет назад +25

    Woman in Burka on a cell phone: "Can you see me now?"

  • @tylerdowling1852
    @tylerdowling1852 4 года назад +92

    stone cold Steve Austin is trying his hardest

    • @IScreamedWolf
      @IScreamedWolf 3 года назад +2

      Kinda Chilly Steve Austin

    • @jonathanmyers377
      @jonathanmyers377 3 года назад +1

      Hey Tyler, your mom said your sandwich is ready.

    • @jonathanmyers377
      @jonathanmyers377 3 года назад +2

      It’s a fish sandwich

    • @Dasusify
      @Dasusify 2 года назад

      ah, Internet, I love you

    • @paengferrer
      @paengferrer 2 года назад +1

      You inserted a celebrity to make a joke. I see what you did there.

  • @TheScripflipNetwork
    @TheScripflipNetwork 5 лет назад +26

    Their faces had better coverage than their phones

    • @Taobeth
      @Taobeth 2 года назад

      It was funny but didn't seem to follow from "progressive and technologically advanced" because you would assume they would have good coverage on their phones as well

  • @jasonontherez6668
    @jasonontherez6668 4 года назад

    You are seriously saving my career. Thanks!!

  • @manojjainism
    @manojjainism 4 года назад +24

    teacher: if a child lives with tolerance ,he learns to be patient
    child :so i will not live with tolerance because i want to be a doctor

  • @mikeherd8551
    @mikeherd8551 6 лет назад +8

    Don't know if you've ever heard of Frankie Boyle Jerry but he is superb at the 'is like' structure! He uses that to make a lot of social commentary points!

    • @JerryCorley
      @JerryCorley  5 лет назад

      Mike Herd Haven’t heard of Frankie Boyle, but I’ll be sure to check him out.

    • @violenceisfun991
      @violenceisfun991 5 лет назад +1

      He one of the most famous comedians here in the UK. He was on a show called Mock The Week. I would recommend that show to everyone who enjoys laughing

  • @shubhangmalviya5302
    @shubhangmalviya5302 3 месяца назад

    Thank for your helpful guidance sir. Still learning alot through your videos as I am writing my next open mic set and also for my new comedy show for my RUclips channel.

  • @dendemano
    @dendemano 3 года назад +7

    The thing to remember is that for something to be funny it has to have an element of truth and there has to be a victim.

    • @Ishbikes
      @Ishbikes Год назад

      That’s true, even if the victim is yourself

  • @antoniogonzales2420
    @antoniogonzales2420 Год назад

    Love it!

  • @bluetv2
    @bluetv2 2 года назад +7

    Love this! But at the same time, I turned to comedy because I wasn’t an academic. Despite it being my favourite subject, the academic way it’s presented means I might have also skipped this class.🤦🏽‍♂️

  • @davidoberlin4186
    @davidoberlin4186 6 лет назад +13

    Millions of fish washed up in the harbor around Redondo Beach, when they were finished they went into town for supper.

  • @JohnLeggio
    @JohnLeggio 3 года назад +1

    Is there a part 1 to this video? The title says this is #2

  • @ComedyButt
    @ComedyButt 3 года назад

    Thx for the tips

  • @johanvanhuyssteen9217
    @johanvanhuyssteen9217 Год назад

    Thanks dude. Appreciate it!

  • @reservoirfrog1
    @reservoirfrog1 6 лет назад +1

    Fuck yeah, Bill Burr! You referenced one of my favourite bits!

  • @ArchonSpire
    @ArchonSpire 5 лет назад +9

    "...In this episode, I'm gonna discuss a tweet, I got from somebody on twitter..." I didn't know you can get it from anywhere else.

    • @Berkmnn
      @Berkmnn 5 лет назад +1

      Ronald Patrick Gonzalez you quoted it wrong lol he said, “a question I got on twitter from one of my followers”

  • @jesterjhajij.j.8891
    @jesterjhajij.j.8891 3 года назад +2

    Respect from india ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️👍👍👍 thanks sir.

  • @AwetisticlyPerfect
    @AwetisticlyPerfect 4 года назад +7

    My wife asked me “what is the most complex thing you do in the kitchen?” I had to think for a bit then I realized that cooking crack is the most complex thing i do in the kitchen

  • @michaelsix9684
    @michaelsix9684 2 года назад

    great tips here

  • @dev__adi
    @dev__adi 3 месяца назад

    "that's a lot to swallow"... Michael Scott giggling in the corner

  • @FrostDrive
    @FrostDrive 6 лет назад +8

    I feel so lost I don't get any of these jokes. both in the video and in the comments.

    • @leohewett
      @leohewett 6 лет назад +2

      its a very US late night tv / monologue style of comedy. Its not rib tickling if you prefer a darker humour.

    • @davidoberlin4186
      @davidoberlin4186 6 лет назад +1

      is that a joke?

    • @aircody345
      @aircody345 5 лет назад

      Michael Mouch did you not hear his bill burr reference?

  • @gradcliff2314
    @gradcliff2314 5 лет назад +6

    That Bill Bur bit is one of my favorites. You got to hear him do it though.

    • @das_it_mane
      @das_it_mane 4 года назад +2

      Yeah the delivery here was butchered big time lol

  • @davidemiable
    @davidemiable 10 месяцев назад

    "her head had more coverage then her phone" .... that made me laugh!! You must have used the listing technique?!

    • @JerryCorley
      @JerryCorley  10 месяцев назад

      Precisely. It was inspired by an image of the woman in her hijab and she was holding a phone to her face. I just wrote down what I saw.

  • @bernardcyrus8189
    @bernardcyrus8189 5 лет назад +5

    In Qatar they're rough on crime....get caught stealing and the cut your hand off....Jerry Sandusky could have had his punishment cut in half

  • @karlhungus5554
    @karlhungus5554 Год назад +1

    These days, which stand up comedians do you think have the best material, delivery, and stage presence?

  • @felicity4711
    @felicity4711 6 лет назад +4

    A lot of my best material is self-deprecating. It seems to be the easiest to write. I’d like to able to turn my emotional pain into comedy but I can’t quite get the hang of that. Example: Yesterday I went to a plus-size clothes store and I was still too fat for anything there. Also, when I made fun of myself about it, the saleslady was weirdly cold to me, like she was mad at me. I have a lot of jokes about my weight but specific scenarios like this are more difficult. I’m going to get out my notebook and try the techniques in this video, and the other videos.

    • @Azlorn
      @Azlorn 6 лет назад +2

      felicity4711 that's a good joke. Honesty and true stories are the best comedy imo.
      You should try that joke on stage, work it out a little. It's a good joke.

    • @felicity4711
      @felicity4711 6 лет назад

      Thanks! It’s not a joke yet but I’ll work on it :-)

    • @kiwiwriter
      @kiwiwriter 6 лет назад +2

      The saleslady was wierdly cold - so I heated her up in the microwave...
      So I grabbed two tube dresses and made these leggings...
      I said it's OK I can slip this one on. Tears are also a lubricant.

    • @chasebonin7043
      @chasebonin7043 6 лет назад +2

      felicity4711 not sure if you're still working on this but this is part of the idea I got.
      At my size clothes shopping can prove to be difficult. I try plus size stores but me plus SIZE equals still too fat to shop there.

    • @anguslewis23
      @anguslewis23 6 лет назад

      How About This, Yesterday I Went To A Plus-Size Clothes Store And I Still Too Fat For Anything There! So The Sales Person Told Me "Honey, You Need To Go Over To The Trillion Size Table And Pray For Miracles "!!!!

  • @melskipeacock
    @melskipeacock Год назад

    Thank you, I run several open mics and would refer them to check out your body of work

  • @brokenvanityboston
    @brokenvanityboston 5 лет назад +1

    A good book for comedy is how to be funny by jon marks he talks about this stuff on the book

  • @detraielake1313
    @detraielake1313 6 лет назад

    great help thanks joke doctor #shorefunnyentertainment

  • @capslock9031
    @capslock9031 4 года назад +3

    YT algorithm is broken or sarcastic. I watched some great Stand Up and now it serves me this video?! The poor guy does his best, I figure.

  • @LudGC
    @LudGC 2 года назад

    you wrote for jay leno?

  • @SeriousMoh
    @SeriousMoh 2 года назад +1

    Okay, I sifted through the comments and nobody mentioned it. That tells me one of two things. Either the fact that "even nature makes use of Redondancy" is a very low hanging fruit and too obvious or I have no Idea what the second thing is.
    Seriously, low hanging fruit?

  • @facethestrange15yearsago81
    @facethestrange15yearsago81 6 лет назад +9

    That's one long tweet

  • @C1n1c4l
    @C1n1c4l 2 года назад

    Marriage is like a joke based on analogy. (Pause, and then shrugging) That's was it. (And change subject) :D

  • @patch8376
    @patch8376 Год назад

    Millions of Fish washed up in the harbor around Redondo Beach. They were gutted and cleaned, but the water there's still very soapy.

  • @manojjainism
    @manojjainism 4 года назад +2

    happiness is loving what you get and success is getting what you love so
    if you want to be happy love your wife ,if you want to be successful go cheat on her

  • @joebrowning3433
    @joebrowning3433 4 года назад

    13:30 analogy

  • @petrushmacute6332
    @petrushmacute6332 2 года назад

    wow! Introduce a celebrity, Maxim of 5 Ws, Analogy

  • @brianmcguire5175
    @brianmcguire5175 2 года назад +4

    I didn't laugh at the jokes he wrote around Kirsten and the news item about fish but I respect the process he aptly demonstrated behind that particular joke and also heard the potential behind the writing anyway. One thing many joke fans need to remember is that: if a joke doesn't land with you that doesn't mean it isn't funny for others. My rule is, if it's not funny don't laugh, be wary of anyone who goes above and beyond and tells you that it wasn't funny. Those people missed or never considered the angle, the gist and intention of your joke. I see the humour behind his final set up and punch line but only felt, by personal taste and not anything more, it was too wordy (meaning the Kirsten joke had too many syllables for me to wade through to before I could get the joke) and perhaps even too specifically topical also. Still though my take away was that his examples did in fact perfectly demonstrate the technique being presented here as despite his end product not landing with me it was still obvious his intent and angle which I felt was still very clever. Why am I commenting so? I guess I'm trying to emphasise that anyone who cares about jokes truly can both find the end product not funny for them but because of their respect for the process appreciate the angle and technique behind the composed joke. I imagine this guy has writing experience, he seems to me a creative that can drum up a joke for a show written by unfunny writers. He is the kind of guy a show hires to add comedy to an otherwise bland script. Not an easy task and a very important position in any writing team, one I couldn't do myself

    • @brianmcguire5175
      @brianmcguire5175 2 года назад

      I realised now watching more what would make his jokes land with me more specifically. I wished he leaned harder on the potential for darker punch lines. His coverage joke is very clever and I imagine in context, ie at the gathering he wrote those jokes for and then performed at, at the gathering he was invited to perform at and write jokes for that he was a hit. I would have been part of that laughing party too , caught up in the air of that moment. But stand alone I think if he went Artie lang on the material it would land with me. And so here lies a serious question. Does being darker with humour cheapen the art of joke writing? Does an audience need to be somewhat versed in the art to appreciate it truly? Does my liking of Norm Macdonald's (rip)material hinder my range for joke appreciation. The comedian here is most certainly clean in his jokes here but I mention Norm MacDonald because I can see this comedians methods behind the writing the way I have always seen it behind Macdonald's too(rip). Any comedy fans here willing to read my dumb ass essays please give feed back

    • @Dirty88Dizl
      @Dirty88Dizl Год назад

      I can’t….. I’m trying hard to laugh at the jokes made through these methods. What is more funny is the idea that any of these methods and the results. I got one.. what’s the difference between the planes that did not fly into the twin towers and your jokes…… the planes landed.

    • @brianmcguire5175
      @brianmcguire5175 Год назад

      @@Dirty88Dizl haha good one. Alternatively the kamakasi pilots of ww2 could be used also but to the same affect. I like it! Good one my friend. You've inspired me to try one about bombing. like your joke about comparing a shocking event to a joke with the punchline being about bombing. Let me try,this is for your reaction btw as it's inspired by your joke above. what does your jokes and an American 52 military airplane have in common? They both bomb! Let me know if you like this or if I should abridge it. I like your writing and so will appreciate your input. Thanks and keep up the good work

    • @Dirty88Dizl
      @Dirty88Dizl Год назад

      @@brianmcguire5175 wow thank you, I am trying to bring my natural ability to make people laugh on stage. It is tougher then I thought. I say to myself that I want belly laughs. The b52 bomber joke is simplistic. My punch up would be maybe- tell a Asian joke and then the b52 with the added nuclear bomb aspect. Punch line- they both bomb.. but at least my jokes are innocent and I’m not burning Asians.

    • @Dirty88Dizl
      @Dirty88Dizl Год назад

      @@brianmcguire5175 or! They both bomb and land on innocent people

  • @josephbarclayross6216
    @josephbarclayross6216 6 лет назад +2

    Milions of fish washed up in the harbor at Redondo Beach .... and several blind men were arrested for making bad sexist jokes.

  • @MrXrisd01
    @MrXrisd01 2 года назад

    What's a funny analogy or comparison about using a bidet for first time?

    • @AttentionSpam
      @AttentionSpam Год назад +2

      The first time is like the first time with a lady. Your nervous, you don’t know how it works exactly, you make a mess. That’s all I got

    • @MrXrisd01
      @MrXrisd01 Год назад +1

      @@AttentionSpamomfg how did I not think of that!

    • @AttentionSpam
      @AttentionSpam Год назад +1

      @@MrXrisd01 also could have a bit about after you get good at using it the bidet wants a cigarette after…maybe not that exactly but the image is funny to me. Also some fancy bidets have heated seats and water. If I like warm liquid squirting my butt does that make me gay? As well as the involuntary sounds you make when the water hits the wrong/right spot. I feel like I need a shower after but that kinda defeats the purpose of the bidet

    • @MrXrisd01
      @MrXrisd01 Год назад

      @@AttentionSpam ok that's brilliant. I'm using that. I had said something like, you like washing any polishing the rims on your car right? Why aren't you polishing your rim, or something like that I don't remember now. Got no laughs anyways lol

    • @AttentionSpam
      @AttentionSpam Год назад +1

      @@MrXrisd01 hey I like what where your heads at with the rim job. Maybe a bidet in a car detailing place with a sign above it that says “we love a clean rim” or something to that affect

  • @theconductoresplin8092
    @theconductoresplin8092 6 лет назад

    Im writing a joke book ... Any advice

    • @mvdsanden
      @mvdsanden 6 лет назад

      Hi, I'm about to publish one. Robert Orben is a great example in this matter. So: start with a contents-page (a-z): you want/have to cover virtually all of the alphabet. So what (let's say 3) subjects per character you want to cover? Under 'c': 'cab' is too obvious, as is 'cucumber'. But going through the dictionary, you'll find words/subjects with potential for humor. That's intuition & you have it. Good luck.

    • @theconductoresplin8092
      @theconductoresplin8092 6 лет назад +1

      Hey thanks I'm always open for advice
      Good luck with your book

  • @mr.nobody9697
    @mr.nobody9697 6 лет назад +8

    Millions of dead fish washed up in the harbor around redondo beach. Authorities said they hadnt heard of this many dead fish since they investigated bill cosby.
    Millions of dead fish washed up in the harbor around redondo beach
    Residents said this was the worst smell of washed up fish since Lindsey Lohan.
    Millions of dead fish washed up in the harbor around redondo beach.
    My ex wife always did prefer a cold swim.

    • @johannsebastianbach3411
      @johannsebastianbach3411 5 лет назад +1

      Millions of dead fish washed up in the harbor around redondo beach last week. In a press conference the LA country officials stated that all the fish disappeared inexplicably just one day after the incident.
      And now some news from the food industry. McDonalds CEO Steve Easterbrook announced that they will be releasing a new fried fish menu.
      Is that good or meh?

    • @robertkarlsson3007
      @robertkarlsson3007 5 лет назад +2

      @@johannsebastianbach3411 maybe issues with probability, phrasing it like this perhaps - Rumour has it McD is speedlaunching a new fish burger

  • @JeffSayYes
    @JeffSayYes 6 лет назад +4

    Millions of fish were found washed up on Raydondo Beach Thursday. A few thousand actors too.

  • @awfullyperson
    @awfullyperson 6 лет назад +2

    The 'How I Met Your Mother' joke is the greatest. I lol'd pretty damned hard.

  • @iron60bitch62
    @iron60bitch62 4 года назад +19

    An old girlfriend of mine she asked me to kiss her where it stinks
    I took her to New Jersey

  • @theimmortalolive5267
    @theimmortalolive5267 5 лет назад

    All the jokes in the comments section are better than the video if only because explaining a joke is the death of a joke

  • @karlm7592
    @karlm7592 3 года назад

    I ate a sweet potato today.
    It was good.

  • @XiagraBalls
    @XiagraBalls Год назад

    Wouldn't have got the Kirsty Allen reference.

  • @sushicraves
    @sushicraves 6 лет назад +3

    The city of Redondo Beach said that they will have the fish watering system pipes fixed for their personal showers within the next two weeks

  • @XiagraBalls
    @XiagraBalls Год назад

    There was actually an incongruity in that sentence which you missed and I've just written a joke based on it. 😐

  • @iarlacomedy
    @iarlacomedy Год назад

    No way, i live in Qatar and this was all very unexpected 😂

    • @iarlacomedy
      @iarlacomedy 3 месяца назад

      11 months later I'm checking this video again. Didn't even realise I was writing jokes 11 months ago!

  • @adamweightman
    @adamweightman 4 года назад

    Look Who's Talking

  • @manojjainism
    @manojjainism 4 года назад

    a theif knows a theif as a wolf knows a wolf , they must be friends

  • @manojjainism
    @manojjainism 4 года назад

    dream no small dream for they have no power to move the heart of a man
    but what if i want to move the heart of a woman

  • @TheSkidbro
    @TheSkidbro 5 месяцев назад

    nothing funnier than a powerpoint

    • @JerryCorley
      @JerryCorley  5 месяцев назад

      Good point. But comedy isn’t just about behavior, it’s also about writing skills. There’s an old saying, “You can be the funniest person around, but if you can’t put it on the page, it means nothing.” I’ll try to do more with some live performance examples.

  • @WilliesBroadcast
    @WilliesBroadcast 5 лет назад

    0.04 he says "Ask the Jew Doctor"

  • @kennethvickers413
    @kennethvickers413 2 года назад

    Doha Qatar is where cia maintain a station for meeting Taliban, it’s where tally hold discussions because they consider it neutral territory

  • @NTIS-DHARMIK
    @NTIS-DHARMIK 4 года назад +1

    Apparently doha has erased history because ironically thay have stole from other countries

  • @autumngrace8541
    @autumngrace8541 Год назад

    Qatar is pronounced like kutter. Just FYI, not to cut you off...

    • @JerryCorley
      @JerryCorley  5 месяцев назад +1

      Haha! Yes you’re right, but when that joke was written, she (the girl who was getting married there called it “cataar” also it was the white American pronunciation. We hadn’t been informed until the World Cup 2002. “Not to cut you off “ 😃😂

  • @Redsworldtv
    @Redsworldtv 5 лет назад +3

    When I went to Qatar I slept with another mans wife. When the authorities got to me, I begged them not to cut off my right hand man!

  • @sidewaysrain7609
    @sidewaysrain7609 Месяц назад

    Keep your day job

  • @ishaankhuranagoc1518
    @ishaankhuranagoc1518 4 года назад

    he looks like jhonny sins

  • @niladripramanik8362
    @niladripramanik8362 2 года назад

    Millions of fish washed up in the harbor around Redondo Beach,
    -- so the fishes went to mother earth instead of being into my mother's stomach.

  • @rryan916
    @rryan916 3 месяца назад

    These jokes …

  • @OsoIncog
    @OsoIncog 3 года назад +1

    this doctor should be sued for malpractice

  • @theheavytruth6309
    @theheavytruth6309 3 года назад

    Funniest thing this guy said..was bill and burr.

  • @RobO912
    @RobO912 2 года назад +2

    If your going to be bigoted at least make it funny

    • @RobO912
      @RobO912 2 года назад +1

      Look at these backwards Qatari women who talk on cell phones while wearing a veil instead of shaking their ass for the gram.

    • @deadpanwalking
      @deadpanwalking 4 месяца назад

      You're.

  • @mariedowney1676
    @mariedowney1676 2 года назад

    too negative

  • @pawpatina
    @pawpatina 2 года назад +1

    painful to watch.

  • @Harlem55
    @Harlem55 3 года назад +1

    The problem is that none of this is all that funny in all reality - therefore the principle seems to fail.

    • @JerryCorley
      @JerryCorley  3 года назад +3

      This guy comes at me as a literal “John Doe.” Anonymity is the cloak of a coward. Also, your statement speaks to your naiveté. The material has already been tested in front of lots of different crowds. YOU might not think it’s funny, but a ton of people have already weighed in.
      I was never an Adam Sandler fan. He was never funny to ME. But the dude has made, directed or appeared in 73 films or TV shows so someone thinks he’s funny.

    • @Harlem55
      @Harlem55 3 года назад +1

      @@JerryCorley first of all, Anonymity is the proper absolute enforcement of the concept of freedom of speech. Second of all, most of this material comes across more like an immature middle schooler than anything even remotely reminiscent of any of the greats. He's definitely NO George Carlin or Richard Pryor. Hell- he's not even in Dice Clay status.

  • @Taobeth
    @Taobeth 2 года назад

    This just demonstrates why I'll never beat fan of Burr. Even if his writing is gold, he is tone deaf and lacking any legitimate perspective of the topics he covers.

    • @JerryCorley
      @JerryCorley  2 года назад

      Bill Burr rubs a lot of people the wrong way. A lot of it is by design. Categorically, he’s more like “the Devil’s Advocate” type of comedian. There are things he says that I don’t agree with either. Who’s your favorite. I’d love to know. Maybe I can do a deconstruction of his/her approach.

    • @Taobeth
      @Taobeth 2 года назад

      @@JerryCorley I don't know that I have a favorite, but it would be fun to see you take on Stewart Lee

  • @chromecod
    @chromecod Месяц назад

    Don’t believe this guy, I took his class, he
    doesn’t know anything.

    • @JerryCorley
      @JerryCorley  25 дней назад

      You never took my class Donald Trump

  • @snakewind
    @snakewind 4 месяца назад

    "joke doctor". Makes worst jokes ever.