I was pleasantly surprised at how good this story was! Reminded me a bit of House of Leaves. You might like it if you haven't read it already. Takes weird, uncanny horror like the appearance of the window to a whole other level. cannot overstate how fantastic and unique that book is, look into it. Anyway, I'm not the best at deciphering non-literal meanings from stories, but i really like the window as a metaphor, can totally see how that relates to the other side of the plot with the family stuff. And I thought the note about the pipe was just perfect, that really creeped me out.
Made me think a lot, which is my favorite thing a piece of writing can do. I think my only critique after first listen is that the basement could have used some more setup/context/focus earlier in the story. Having the main focus be on the window for so long and then suddenly switching focus to the basement for the climax at the end left me feeling a bit confused and lost thematically. But that's just observations from a surface level first-listen experience, I'm sure some parts of that were included/intended for reasons I just didn't clue into.
I have a few other short stories on my website taigenmoon.com that are in this same vein, if you're curious. I haven't read them in a while, but I'm not opposed to doing more readings like this
Just found your channel after watching your video about punctuation. Watched a few of your vids
Underrated af channel/vid/story
I was pleasantly surprised at how good this story was! Reminded me a bit of House of Leaves. You might like it if you haven't read it already. Takes weird, uncanny horror like the appearance of the window to a whole other level. cannot overstate how fantastic and unique that book is, look into it. Anyway, I'm not the best at deciphering non-literal meanings from stories, but i really like the window as a metaphor, can totally see how that relates to the other side of the plot with the family stuff. And I thought the note about the pipe was just perfect, that really creeped me out.
Made me think a lot, which is my favorite thing a piece of writing can do. I think my only critique after first listen is that the basement could have used some more setup/context/focus earlier in the story. Having the main focus be on the window for so long and then suddenly switching focus to the basement for the climax at the end left me feeling a bit confused and lost thematically. But that's just observations from a surface level first-listen experience, I'm sure some parts of that were included/intended for reasons I just didn't clue into.
My apologies for the unsolicited review
No problem! I'm glad you enjoyed it so much
Your channel has grown by the thousands! Good job :)
This was really good! Both the story and your reading. Poor protagonist, that probably didn't end well for them.
😭 The cliffhanger?! i really enjoyed this though. your voice was perfect for the story. are you planning on making more like it?
I have a few other short stories on my website taigenmoon.com that are in this same vein, if you're curious. I haven't read them in a while, but I'm not opposed to doing more readings like this
Is there, like, a follow up? Or is this just the cliffhanger everything ends on? Is there some hidden meaning to the window?
WE NEED TO KNOW!
This is a one shot story. I'm glad you enjoyed it, but I usually keep my short stories ambiguous