Story is interesting, but there are issues: 1. It mentions "Zane is part way through genetic changes" but never said anything about starting them or how/why, etc. 2. Zane get abilities with zero explanation. 3. Zane was human, but at 18:56 "shared DNA"... How/when did that happen? In short, it seems parts, explanations, or exposition are missing that make the story continuity just seem off or incomplete.
8:06 Zane suddenly knows EVERYTHING about his guest, whom he knew NOTHING about @8:04. LAME! FAIL! Magically appearing stolen hovercar. LAME! FAIL! Zane is suddenly part way through genetic changes? WHEN DID THIS BEGIN??? NEVER! LAME! FAIL! Vextra automatically blames Zane and Zorla for the attack? What the FU*K??? LAME! FAIL!!! This "story" just gets worse and worse!! It is at best a ROUGH outline! Of course it becomes a "Just So' Story at the end, of course. LAME!! FAIL!!!
8:06 Zane suddenly knows EVERYTHING about his guest, whom he knew NOTHING about @8:04. LAME! FAIL! Magically appearing stolen hovercar. LAME! FAIL! Zane is suddenly part way through genetic changes? WHEN DID THIS BEGIN??? NEVER! LAME! FAIL! Vextra automatically blames Zane and Zorla for the attack? What the FU*K??? LAME! FAIL!!! This "story" just gets worse and worse!! It is at best a ROUGH outline! Of course it becomes a "Just So' Story at the end, of course. LAME!! FAIL!!!
I was reading the 7 comments before watching the video. If you want to be helpful to a writer, so they can improve, repeating in CAPS "lame" and "fail" several times does NOT help AND makes you look childish. The sad part is that you edited you comment; hate to see what you wrote the 1st time.
Story is interesting, but there are issues: 1. It mentions "Zane is part way through genetic changes" but never said anything about starting them or how/why, etc. 2. Zane get abilities with zero explanation. 3. Zane was human, but at 18:56 "shared DNA"... How/when did that happen? In short, it seems parts, explanations, or exposition are missing that make the story continuity just seem off or incomplete.
Cool story, cool pictures
Outstanding video 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟
it was okay wish it included the wedding and their children in it
Write how do you like the story?
8:06 Zane suddenly knows EVERYTHING about his guest, whom he knew NOTHING about @8:04. LAME! FAIL! Magically appearing stolen hovercar. LAME! FAIL! Zane is suddenly part way through genetic changes? WHEN DID THIS BEGIN??? NEVER! LAME! FAIL! Vextra automatically blames Zane and Zorla for the attack? What the FU*K??? LAME! FAIL!!! This "story" just gets worse and worse!! It is at best a ROUGH outline! Of course it becomes a "Just So' Story at the end, of course. LAME!! FAIL!!!
8:06 Zane suddenly knows EVERYTHING about his guest, whom he knew NOTHING about @8:04. LAME! FAIL! Magically appearing stolen hovercar. LAME! FAIL! Zane is suddenly part way through genetic changes? WHEN DID THIS BEGIN??? NEVER! LAME! FAIL! Vextra automatically blames Zane and Zorla for the attack? What the FU*K??? LAME! FAIL!!! This "story" just gets worse and worse!! It is at best a ROUGH outline! Of course it becomes a "Just So' Story at the end, of course. LAME!! FAIL!!!
I was reading the 7 comments before watching the video. If you want to be helpful to a writer, so they can improve, repeating in CAPS "lame" and "fail" several times does NOT help AND makes you look childish. The sad part is that you edited you comment; hate to see what you wrote the 1st time.