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PLEASE could someone read this Q4 paragraph, and mark it or give some feedback. Thanks To a large extent I agree with the statement. From line 25 to the end the writer presents Mr Fishers attitudes towards Tibets story to be amazingly better than expected. This can be seen at the end of the extract when we learn the story was "something new. "Something entirely original ". Here the writer uses two short sentances to illustrate how Mr fisher is speechless and unable to expiain what he’s just read. It is as though Tibbets story has brought Mr fisher back to life as, he begins to smile". Furthermore the short sentances hilight how breathtaking and overwhelming the story is, once you start reading you cant go back . Its truly amazing. Furthermore the repetition of "something” implies now tiblets story is not the same as every other in the world, its new and never been done before. Its so undescribable the writer presents Mr fisher to be muddled, as he begins to figure out what to do. Therefore, the writer creates Me fishers reaction towards the story to be far better than he expected, leaving a new Ora within him and the story.
Hi Mr everything English could you please give an appropriate feedback for this question I strongly agree to this statement because Tibet stories is different from Mr fisher stories what he has expected and both reactions where extreme. This is evident by the quote " Mr fisher began to experience a very strange sensation. It began as a heightening in his diaphragm, as if a long unused muscle had been brought into actions" the writer has used juxtaposition to create an usual meaning of stories from Mr fisher and Tibet is different from others and the writer is doing zooming in because there is a following points of view. A conversational use of the technique might first create in the reader's mind a bird's eye view, or aerial shots, of the settings. Futhermore, the quote " this was something new . Something entirely original" it highlights the writer has used short sentences to build up more tension to the readers to know what is happening next as the source develops . Alternatively the quote the quote the writer has used the word "something and something" it is a reputation to gain more competitive advantage and it is expressing their opinions to people have about how good they are in the extract, and it made him him speechless and unable to explain what he is talking out. Alternatively, the quote " He read it again" , critically this time, marketing off the paragraphs with notes in red "the use of red is interesting because it is colour imagery used to draw the reader's attention to a symbolic object, communicate something about a character or emphasize a theme. On their. Hand the quote " Mr fisher began to experience a very strange sensation" this quote is referring to Mr fisher on how it began as a tightening in his diaphragm, as if a long usual muscle had been brought into actions . His breathing quickened, stopped quickened again it not going in a normal functioning the way it used to be and it is giving a pause to it
@Risko yeah ik, but its hard when u try rem everything night before. but it wont be as bad for language, as you dont have to remember quotes and stuff, was tougher for lit
Someone help. At 9:30 he says he can use the same methods that he used for question 3 but with different effects, However, at the beginning, he says you can't use the same methods used in question 2 and 3 in question 4.
He said "you can't use the same methods used in question 2 and 3 in question 4" but you can use Q3 quotes and method AS LONG AS it is within range with the section of Q4 since Q3 talks about the whole source
link it back to your point to show your examiner you’re considering the question itself. so e.g. … as a result, the writer highlights how tibbet’s story is better than mr fisher expected due to the elated reaction of mr fisher
how many marks would you guys give to this paragraph? From line 25 to the end, the writer portrays Mr Fisher's reaction to Tibbet’s work as exaggerated and extreme. This is shown in the quote “His breathing quickened, stopped, quickened again”, here the writer uses the rule of three to focus on the change of emotions that Mr Fisher went through when reading Tibbet’s story. The verb “quickened” is used to suggests that Mr Fisher was excited in that moment because of Tibbet’s story being better than what he expected, but then goes through a change when the verb “stopped” is used as an hyperbole to portray the change of state from being surprised by Tibbet’s story to seeing something that make his heart skip a beat by how bad it is. Due to this extreme and exaggerated reaction I strongly agree with the statement.
I gave ChatGPT the mark scheme and it said this: "Based on the provided excerpt, I would assess your response as Level 2 - 6-10 marks." • Here's the reasoning: 1. You make a response to the focus of the statement by discussing Mr Fisher's exaggerated and extreme reaction to Tibbet's work. 2. You demonstrate some understanding of the writer's methods by identifying the use of the rule of three and explaining the effect of using the verbs "quickened" and "stopped." 3. You select appropriate textual references by quoting the line that supports your argument. 4. You make some evaluative comments on the effect of Mr Fisher's reaction on the reader, stating that it portrays his change in emotions. • To improve your response and potentially reach a higher level, consider the following suggestions: 1. Develop your response further: Expand on your explanation of the effect of Mr Fisher's exaggerated reaction. How does this contribute to the overall tone or theme of the passage? Does it enhance the reader's understanding of the characters or their relationship? Provide more in-depth analysis and interpretation. 2. Use additional textual evidence: While you provided one quote to support your argument, try to incorporate more examples from the text. Look for other instances where the writer uses techniques or language to depict Mr Fisher's exaggerated reaction and discuss their specific effects.
@dwc LDN please can you do mine Q4 paragraph, and mark it or give some feedback. Thanks To a large extent I agree with the statement. From line 25 to the end the writer presents Mr Fishers attitudes towards Tibets story to be amazingly better than expected. This can be seen at the end of the extract when we learn the story was "something new. "Something entirely original ". Here the writer uses two short sentances to illustrate how Mr fisher is speechless and unable to expiain what he’s just read. It is as though Tibbets story has brought Mr fisher back to life as, he begins to smile". Furthermore the short sentances hilight how breathtaking and overwhelming the story is, once you start reading you cant go back . Its truly amazing. Furthermore the repetition of "something” implies now tiblets story is not the same as every other in the world, its new and never been done before. Its so undescribable the writer presents Mr fisher to be muddled, as he begins to figure out what to do. Therefore, the writer creates Me fishers reaction towards the story to be far better than he expected, leaving a new Ora within him and the story.
@@Analev it said it is about Level 3 10 to 16 - You used a range of structural features such as Reptition and short sentences, which is great - Your effects wasn't in much depth, try to explain 3 effects for every point - You didn't cover a wide range of quotation from the extract - You needed to explain the effect on the reader - You needed to show an understanding of the Writer's method to convey the statement But overall, It is great💞
@@donia-a966 thanks you so much xx So for the effect would that be 3 effects after the first quote and 3 effects after the second zoomed in quote. To cover more quotation over the extract would that just be to do another paragraph. And I’ll definitely make sure to add the effect on the reader. And to understand the writers methods do you have to say something like: the writer has used this device to protray… or something like that ? Thanks sm fir the advice 💗😊
@@Analev Yes..try to write 3 effects for the first quote/Point and 3 effects for the second quote/point because the Exam criteria highlights that you need a detailed effects. For more quotations, try to embed more quotations in your paragraph, even if some of them not in much depth but you would be covering a wider range of quotations from the extract. and yes extactly what you said for the Writer's method You're so welcome and good luck to you💞💞
I did as well and I think it’s fine as long as you talked about both parts of the question in sufficient detail I wrote a page for each paragraph and gave an alternative view and had (imo) quite detailed points as in no unnecessary waffle. I also comptines 2 bits of the question on one paragraphe
@@NekoPanda3 'These comments ('it makes the reader more interested' or 'makes the reader read on') do not add any understanding to the effect of the structural feature and cannot be credited above Level 1'. This is for question 3 btw. If you're asking about question 4, you can't write it because it's not part of the question; it's about your own views and not the reader's interest.
@@solo6080 got it. Thank you. I hope we can go trough the exam with calm, chill, and let our brain flow. Not under pressure by the atmosphere of the exam
if anyone sees this i need help on this question im trying to write about how the paragraph length varies in the snow avalanche text since in the end the paragraph is way longer but im quite unsure how to write if anyone could help id appreciate it
Perhaps you could say how the last paragraph is extremely long as it allows the focus to shift completely towards the avalanche. The long paragraphs are perhaps indicative of the potency and the danger which the avalanche possesses - the overly large description highlighting the scale and magnitude of it and hence also making us question the state of Zoe at the end - is she dead or still alive? This juxtaposes the sentence lengths at the beginning which were shorter - conveying how at the beginning Zoe was unaware of the dangers that could occur and her fleeting notion of the mountains and nature. Hence, this shift in focus throughout conveyed by the varying sentence lengths attracts and retains our attention as it implies the sudden change that Zoe's environment undergoes , the crisis which occurs and the ending with the cliff-hanger at the end.
@@drs_dr0n376 i found it alright but for my q3 i struggled a bit with time. but just cuoldnt manage to check over it but overall i wrote a lot and it was all at an ok standard if i do say so myself. hbu
@@m.k.5585 everything went well except for when i got to q5 at the end. Had to piss really badly and so my concentration was really low, not sure how well my creative writing was, I usually get 39 or 38, might get like 34 or 33 this time, we'll see.
@Mr Everything English Can someone please take a look at my response? Feedback is apprieciated. This paper is from the June of 2018. q3. in the Mr Fisher text At the beginning of the text the writer uses a short sentence in line 5 to introduce disappointment in the readers. But then the writer quickly switches the focus to Mr Fisher’s flashback of books in the past in lines 9 to 11. This conveys Mr Fisher’s excitement to the readers. The flashback pulls readers out of the present disappointment to the glory of the past. The use of a long complex sentence here clearly shows Mr Fisher’s passion and enthusiasm for old books. Hence readers are also excited about the old books and are distracted from the disappointing term. As the text develops, the writer switches the focus between the magnificent past and gloomy present constantly. In lines 25 to 28, the writer shifts the focus from Mr Fisher’s ‘gloomy train of thoughts’ to ‘Alistar Tibbet’ who represents and symbolizes hope. This change of focus to a student with ‘spark’ gives readers hope. Readers expect Tibbet to be a turning point and make the present more similar to the glorious past. The short sentence in line 27 ‘An amiable boy, this Tibbet’ indicates the narrator’s hope in Tibbet through an appreciating tone. This hope is emphasized through the short sentence then conveyd to the readers. Hence readers look forward to exactly how Tibbet will change the current situation and exactly how much ‘spark’ he has.
Sir I am wondering if I can get away with 4 paragraphs? The timing will be tight but if it can help secure more marks, do you think it is worth it? Any advice will be greatly appreciated!
that's question 2: Write how the writer presents (whatever) in this paragraph. Alternate interpretation is this question where he mentions to strongly agree with the statement but you can disagree.
Can i make any references to outside the given area from the text, here from line 25 to the end. So could i use, as mr everything english has, a structural technique to show change such as juxtaposition or repettion to show similarity. Is that allowed or would it not be marked?
that's better for the structure question. It wouldn't be allowed since you're going against the question by picking something outside the given boundaries
@donia-a966 you could start of with saying i agree with the statement to some extent... then write paragraphs in support with the statement and also another one against the statement
@@donia-a966 no worries, have you pre planned for question 5? if so could you help me out as im really struggling to write my 5 pararaphs for the narrative
Yeah it helps get more marks usually. So you could say that a quote uses -technique- to make the reader think -something that reinforces your point- Hope it helps
i guess you could say that the short sentences emphasise his speechlessness like a man who reads and has an advanced vocabulary is still unable to describe the piece of work which shows how good it is hope it kinda makes sense 😊
@@kyliegates3157 yeah thanks I did just that. My problem is it takes me too long to answer questions. O well let's see how Monday goes. Paper 2, is the real troublesome one
Hello yaar, is there any possibilities of me sending you my q5? or do you not do that? if yes, is there any email or something i can send to? Jzakallah
it's what he advises but if you haven't done it in your mock before for practice I wouldn't recommend experimenting now- it's abit too late so stick to what you're used to and improve at that
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PLEASE could someone read this Q4 paragraph, and mark it or give some feedback. Thanks
To a large extent I agree with the statement. From line 25 to the end the writer presents Mr Fishers attitudes towards Tibets story to be amazingly better
than expected. This can be seen at the end of the extract when we learn the story was "something new.
"Something entirely original ". Here
the writer uses two short sentances to illustrate how Mr fisher is speechless and unable to expiain what he’s just read. It is as though Tibbets story has
brought Mr fisher back to life as, he begins
to smile". Furthermore the short sentances
hilight how breathtaking and overwhelming
the story is, once you start reading
you cant go back . Its truly amazing.
Furthermore the repetition of "something” implies now tiblets story is not the same
as every other in the world, its new and
never been done before. Its so undescribable the writer presents Mr fisher to be muddled, as he begins to figure out what to do. Therefore, the writer creates Me fishers reaction towards the story to be far better than he expected, leaving a new Ora within him and the story.
thats rlly good
not good enough
@@anamzakir-gi3zc how could it be better ?
@@Analev just be better
@@Analev dont use futhermore twice
use in addition for the second one
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Hi Mr everything English could you please give an appropriate feedback for this question
I strongly agree to this statement because Tibet stories is different from Mr fisher stories what he has expected and both reactions where extreme. This is evident by the quote " Mr fisher began to experience a very strange sensation. It began as a heightening in his diaphragm, as if a long unused muscle had been brought into actions" the writer has used juxtaposition to create an usual meaning of stories from Mr fisher and Tibet is different from others and the writer is doing zooming in because there is a following points of view. A conversational use of the technique might first create in the reader's mind a bird's eye view, or aerial shots, of the settings.
Futhermore, the quote " this was something new . Something entirely original" it highlights the writer has used short sentences to build up more tension to the readers to know what is happening next as the source develops . Alternatively the quote the quote the writer has used the word "something and something" it is a reputation to gain more competitive advantage and it is expressing their opinions to people have about how good they are in the extract, and it made him him speechless and unable to explain what he is talking out.
Alternatively, the quote " He read it again" , critically this time, marketing off the paragraphs with notes in red "the use of red is interesting because it is colour imagery used to draw the reader's attention to a symbolic object, communicate something about a character or emphasize a theme. On their. Hand the quote " Mr fisher began to experience a very strange sensation" this quote is referring to Mr fisher on how it began as a tightening in his diaphragm, as if a long usual muscle had been brought into actions
. His breathing quickened, stopped quickened again it not going in a normal functioning the way it used to be and it is giving a pause to it
thank you so much your videos are legendary. when are you planning on doing language paper 2 out of intertest ?
Next week I think
Yeah it’s the next week, which is low-key kinda tough since there’s no ‘one week gap’ like we do rn
@@TypicalSullyEditz true but we also have the weekend
@Risko yeah ik, but its hard when u try rem everything night before. but it wont be as bad for language, as you dont have to remember quotes and stuff, was tougher for lit
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Someone help. At 9:30 he says he can use the same methods that he used for question 3 but with different effects, However, at the beginning, he says you can't use the same methods used in question 2 and 3 in question 4.
He said "you can't use the same methods used in question 2 and 3 in question 4" but you can use Q3 quotes and method AS LONG AS it is within range with the section of Q4 since Q3 talks about the whole source
In summary, you CAN reuse methods and quote from prior questions, as long as it is in range from *line "(a random number)" to the end* in Q4
why does AQA upload model answers that are one mark off?
is there no 20 mark answers?
i think they want people to believe that there isn’t exactly a perfect answer due to people convey points and perspectives in different ways
Got my English mock tmor idk how to feel but you have helped me to understand what to do im going to start revising more
I just need a pass
So we can talk about language devices and structure here
yep
What do you do for the "L" in pretzel? In lit id link it to historical context, but what do you link to in language?
Just refer to the point again and say how the writer achieves whatever point you written
@@himanshushrestha5535 are you nepalese
yes
link it back to your point to show your examiner you’re considering the question itself. so e.g. … as a result, the writer highlights how tibbet’s story is better than mr fisher expected due to the elated reaction of mr fisher
hes made a vid about prtezel paragraphs
Everytime it's question 4 that I get the lowest mark 😢
how many marks would you guys give to this paragraph?
From line 25 to the end, the writer portrays Mr Fisher's reaction to Tibbet’s work as exaggerated and extreme. This is shown in the quote “His breathing quickened, stopped, quickened again”, here the writer uses the rule of three to focus on the change of emotions that Mr Fisher went through when reading Tibbet’s story. The verb “quickened” is used to suggests that Mr Fisher was excited in that moment because of Tibbet’s story being better than what he expected, but then goes through a change when the verb “stopped” is used as an hyperbole to portray the change of state from being surprised by Tibbet’s story to seeing something that make his heart skip a beat by how bad it is. Due to this extreme and exaggerated reaction I strongly agree with the statement.
I gave ChatGPT the mark scheme and it said this:
"Based on the provided excerpt, I would assess your response as Level 2 - 6-10 marks."
• Here's the reasoning:
1. You make a response to the focus of the statement by discussing Mr Fisher's exaggerated and extreme reaction to Tibbet's work.
2. You demonstrate some understanding of the writer's methods by identifying the use of the rule of three and explaining the effect of using the verbs "quickened" and "stopped."
3. You select appropriate textual references by quoting the line that supports your argument.
4. You make some evaluative comments on the effect of Mr Fisher's reaction on the reader, stating that it portrays his change in emotions.
• To improve your response and potentially reach a higher level, consider the following suggestions:
1. Develop your response further: Expand on your explanation of the effect of Mr Fisher's exaggerated reaction. How does this contribute to the overall tone or theme of the passage? Does it enhance the reader's understanding of the characters or their relationship? Provide more in-depth analysis and interpretation.
2. Use additional textual evidence: While you provided one quote to support your argument, try to incorporate more examples from the text. Look for other instances where the writer uses techniques or language to depict Mr Fisher's exaggerated reaction and discuss their specific effects.
@dwc LDN
please can you do mine
Q4 paragraph, and mark it or give some feedback. Thanks
To a large extent I agree with the statement. From line 25 to the end the writer presents Mr Fishers attitudes towards Tibets story to be amazingly better
than expected. This can be seen at the end of the extract when we learn the story was "something new.
"Something entirely original ". Here
the writer uses two short sentances to illustrate how Mr fisher is speechless and unable to expiain what he’s just read. It is as though Tibbets story has
brought Mr fisher back to life as, he begins
to smile". Furthermore the short sentances
hilight how breathtaking and overwhelming
the story is, once you start reading
you cant go back . Its truly amazing.
Furthermore the repetition of "something” implies now tiblets story is not the same
as every other in the world, its new and
never been done before. Its so undescribable the writer presents Mr fisher to be muddled, as he begins to figure out what to do. Therefore, the writer creates Me fishers reaction towards the story to be far better than he expected, leaving a new Ora within him and the story.
@@Analev it said it is about Level 3 10 to 16
- You used a range of structural features such as Reptition and short sentences, which is great
- Your effects wasn't in much depth, try to explain 3 effects for every point
- You didn't cover a wide range of quotation from the extract
- You needed to explain the effect on the reader
- You needed to show an understanding of the Writer's method to convey the statement
But overall, It is great💞
@@donia-a966 thanks you so much xx
So for the effect would that be 3 effects after the first quote and 3 effects after the second zoomed in quote.
To cover more quotation over the extract would that just be to do another paragraph.
And I’ll definitely make sure to add the effect on the reader.
And to understand the writers methods do you have to say something like: the writer has used this device to protray… or something like that ?
Thanks sm fir the advice 💗😊
@@Analev Yes..try to write 3 effects for the first quote/Point and 3 effects for the second quote/point because the Exam criteria highlights that you need a detailed effects.
For more quotations, try to embed more quotations in your paragraph, even if some of them not in much depth but you would be covering a wider range of quotations from the extract.
and yes extactly what you said for the Writer's method
You're so welcome and good luck to you💞💞
could u do a write up paragraph example for thew speechless plan? the example u showed was of the wrong text - plz
Ive got my resits tomorrow 😢
same
@@a1pha_lmao how did u find it
ez f'ed up Q3 n 4 tho i think@@unknown-xb1mg
Are 2 PRTZEL paragraphs in detail for question 4 enough if we didn't have enough time
Did the same mare - can’t change it now. Not full marks but a decent answer
I did as well and I think it’s fine as long as you talked about both parts of the question in sufficient detail I wrote a page for each paragraph and gave an alternative view and had (imo) quite detailed points as in no unnecessary waffle. I also comptines 2 bits of the question on one paragraphe
here you did a structural para for question 4 . considering i do 3 paragraphs in total should i do two language para now
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Sir please answer. Do you have to do a disagree paragraph. like 3 agree 1 disagree.???????
My school taught us to do at least one agree and one disagree
if sm focused more on the opinion like their response instead of analyzing the quote then what sort of mark would u get
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Aim for 9 😟
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how to write this question can i get format
It says it in the video
@@Stu67nt so can we write it same as question no3 or 2
@@HarmanKahlon-xz3lmyes
Aoa
Sir kindly you may share source A and B related to this sample or practice paper.
sir will we get marks if we write the effect on the reader as well? like feelings invoked to the reader?
jzk
yh but u cant write it makes the reader more interested or makes the reader read on
@@telmaamaris that so? Can u explain why?
@@NekoPanda3 'These comments ('it makes the reader more interested' or 'makes the reader read on') do not add any understanding to the effect of the structural feature and cannot be credited above Level 1'. This is for question 3 btw. If you're asking about question 4, you can't write it because it's not part of the question; it's about your own views and not the reader's interest.
@@solo6080 got it. Thank you. I hope we can go trough the exam with calm, chill, and let our brain flow. Not under pressure by the atmosphere of the exam
@@NekoPanda3 I hope so too. I really hope they give us a decent extract to use like this one and not a dull one, otherwise were screwed.
if anyone sees this i need help on this question im trying to write about how the paragraph length varies in the snow avalanche text since in the end the paragraph is way longer but im quite unsure how to write if anyone could help id appreciate it
Perhaps you could say how the last paragraph is extremely long as it allows the focus to shift completely towards the avalanche. The long paragraphs are perhaps indicative of the potency and the danger which the avalanche possesses - the overly large description highlighting the scale and magnitude of it and hence also making us question the state of Zoe at the end - is she dead or still alive? This juxtaposes the sentence lengths at the beginning which were shorter - conveying how at the beginning Zoe was unaware of the dangers that could occur and her fleeting notion of the mountains and nature. Hence, this shift in focus throughout conveyed by the varying sentence lengths attracts and retains our attention as it implies the sudden change that Zoe's environment undergoes , the crisis which occurs and the ending with the cliff-hanger at the end.
@@drs_dr0n376 bro is so ready for tmrw
@@m.k.5585 how did you find the paper?
@@drs_dr0n376 i found it alright but for my q3 i struggled a bit with time. but just cuoldnt manage to check over it but overall i wrote a lot and it was all at an ok standard if i do say so myself. hbu
@@m.k.5585 everything went well except for when i got to q5 at the end. Had to piss really badly and so my concentration was really low, not sure how well my creative writing was, I usually get 39 or 38, might get like 34 or 33 this time, we'll see.
do you agree with all 3 paragraphs?
@Mr Everything English
Can someone please take a look at my response? Feedback is apprieciated. This paper is from the June of 2018.
q3. in the Mr Fisher text
At the beginning of the text the writer uses a short sentence in line 5 to introduce disappointment in the readers. But then the writer quickly switches the focus to Mr Fisher’s flashback of books in the past in lines 9 to 11. This conveys Mr Fisher’s excitement to the readers. The flashback pulls readers out of the present disappointment to the glory of the past. The use of a long complex sentence here clearly shows Mr Fisher’s passion and enthusiasm for old books. Hence readers are also excited about the old books and are distracted from the disappointing term.
As the text develops, the writer switches the focus between the magnificent past and gloomy present constantly. In lines 25 to 28, the writer shifts the focus from Mr Fisher’s ‘gloomy train of thoughts’ to ‘Alistar Tibbet’ who represents and symbolizes hope. This change of focus to a student with ‘spark’ gives readers hope. Readers expect Tibbet to be a turning point and make the present more similar to the glorious past. The short sentence in line 27 ‘An amiable boy, this Tibbet’ indicates the narrator’s hope in Tibbet through an appreciating tone. This hope is emphasized through the short sentence then conveyd to the readers. Hence readers look forward to exactly how Tibbet will change the current situation and exactly how much ‘spark’ he has.
Stop copying from online I know
This is really good
@@shirshir516 this is my own response
It's really a great answer. You should proud of yourself!
Like a 7/8
Half way guys, its now the same days remaning as if we were doing mocks.
Sir I am wondering if I can get away with 4 paragraphs? The timing will be tight but if it can help secure more marks, do you think it is worth it? Any advice will be greatly appreciated!
Just play fifa
he legit suggests to do 3-4
@Yasir Ahmed akhi you got any tips for paper 1
@Yasir Ahmed bro i hate question 3 with heart.
@Yasir Ahmed you just gotta waffle your way through it
Can you not talk about authors intent or alternate interpretation in paper 1 since I can't remember you talking about them? Thanks
that's question 2: Write how the writer presents (whatever) in this paragraph.
Alternate interpretation is this question where he mentions to strongly agree with the statement but you can disagree.
Exam in 10 mins
Is a volta applicable outside of a poetry text as a device?
no its only in poetry
@@Blaze-hq9jk thankyou
What's the minimum quote for paper 1 question 4?
3
Where do you find previous year answers?
Can i make any references to outside the given area from the text, here from line 25 to the end. So could i use, as mr everything english has, a structural technique to show change such as juxtaposition or repettion to show similarity. Is that allowed or would it not be marked?
that's better for the structure question. It wouldn't be allowed since you're going against the question by picking something outside the given boundaries
Can someone help me on how to structure question 4 like sentance starters for the question to follow...would be really helpful💓💓
You can use "Overall i largely agree with this statement because..."
@@fantakonekouyate4239 Thanks
@donia-a966 you could start of with saying i agree with the statement to some extent... then write paragraphs in support with the statement and also another one against the statement
@@shahbazplay714 Thank you sm..this is really useful
@@donia-a966 no worries, have you pre planned for question 5? if so could you help me out as im really struggling to write my 5 pararaphs for the narrative
do you need to talk about the reader
Yeah it helps get more marks usually. So you could say that a quote uses -technique- to make the reader think -something that reinforces your point- Hope it helps
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Good luck guys
Thanks but kinda stuck on the paragraph. What effect do the short back to back sentences have ? Lost for words
i guess you could say that the short sentences emphasise his speechlessness like a man who reads and has an advanced vocabulary is still unable to describe the piece of work which shows how good it is
hope it kinda makes sense 😊
@@kyliegates3157 yeah thanks I did just that. My problem is it takes me too long to answer questions. O well let's see how Monday goes. Paper 2, is the real troublesome one
@@krane5649 same tbh it takes me awhile to get the right words on paper hoping monday goes well for the both of us
Would the point be the same for all the 3 paragraphs also does the 3rd have to be a conclusion?
All three paragraphs are separate with different points. No conclusion.
Thank you!
Hello yaar, is there any possibilities of me sending you my q5? or do you not do that? if yes, is there any email or something i can send to? Jzakallah
Is he Muslim?
@@HaalandSZN9 yep he is
I’m pretty sure u have to pay or smithing on his website, if he’s feeling lenient he might let u tho for free
SIR is it a wise idea to start the exam by doing question 5 first?
it depends on your choice do first what u feel easy to gain maximum marks
ive done that and its a good way to bag as many marks
it's what he advises but if you haven't done it in your mock before for practice I wouldn't recommend experimenting now- it's abit too late so stick to what you're used to and improve at that
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English mock tmr 💀 done zero revision for English language thibk I’m cooked
how was it? mines in 1 week
@@fyzan24 yikes lmfao mines in 1 week for actual gcses
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