SRPH: Volume 1, Chapter 1 - Unrelenting Flame
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- Опубликовано: 9 ноя 2024
- Seraphina Vermillion and Zelena Ray are about to start their journey to become huntresses at Oscuro Academy in Vacuo. Both of them carry their past with them and they will soon find that their unexpected meeting will shape how their futures unfold...
Let me know what you all thought of the first chapter in SRPH's story! My story telling isn't great but I would appreciate your feedback!
Zelena Ray, Seraphina Vermillion and Team SRPH belong to Phoenix/Night
Artwork used in this video belongs to the respective Artists linked below
Please do not use these characters or art without permission
Artist Links:
Hoshi Oujo
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Twitter: / hoshioujo
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RUclips: / @hoshioujo
Twitter: / phoenixnight7
Discord: / discord
When you stop binging an anime to watch this right away.
Truuuu
HECK TO THE FRIK YEH
If you wrote a freakin book about these characters I'd buy like 10 copies cuz im literally in love rn
I would buy a copy of the story as well.
Glad to hear it! I would need to get permission from Rooster Teeth to use the RWBY Intellectual Property but maybe one day I will be able to 😊
IlL tAkE yOuR eNtIrE sToCk-jokes aside im writing this before watching and so far I've loved every second of this and really look forward to the next chapter
OMG IMAGINE IF THIS GETS ANIMATED
@@zaneisgoingtohelll somebody get Mark from the SLVR trailers on this
Me rewatching this again: SOMEBODY GIVE THOSE GIRLS SOME HUGS!
I think zelena and blake would be good friends
Beautiful story. The one who is terrified by her ability to bring an enemy's greatest fear to life, is able to help a friend face her greatest fear through kind words.
Now she'll have to face her own.
How poetic
ShadowHand
Indeed
I have the perfect ship name for Seraphina Vermillion and Zelena Ray, *Caduceus.* The caduceus is the staff carried by Hermes in Greek mythology. It is a short staff entwined by _two serpents_ (Zelena), sometimes surmounted by _wings_ (Sera). Often used as a symbol of medicine, symbolising how the relationship was one of healing and growth.
Omg yesss
I am not ashamed to admit I feel like wanting to cry in happiness for Sera. Wise words and genuine support from someone considered an outsider, after a year since losing her ability to fly, she’s now on the path to healing. I can pretty much see her responding with equal kindness, once she learns of Zelena’s semblance, which will likely be when Zelena unintentionally uses it in either self-defense or protecting someone else.
Obscuro.... My Mother Leguenge Word for Darkness. A Darkness of Shade, just like the A signal to Beacon.
Leguenge
The Darkness (oscuro) of Shade.
The Signal to Beacon
The Sanctum of Haven.
Then we have Atlas... and nothing else.
If people don't know, we got a 31 second sneak peak of volume 8!!!!.
With team YALO....as I call it.
@@chifuyuko so yellow
Where?
@@raineecho4005 go to murder of birds channel
chifuyuko
Or team ORJY
Sorry, I had to say it. It’s too good of an opportunity to pass.
Ummm isn’t Sera’s faunus trait a predator to Zelena’s? Dannnngg.
Also I would love to see the other 2 members to be faunus as well.
Maaayyybe.... this will be commented on in the future actually lol but you will have to wait and see for the next two characters 😊
Phoenix/Night
never failed to surprise us before so it’s worth the wait😸 goodluck and stay safe
I think I get what you're saying, but it's phrased kinda weird.
@@alexjewett7455
Oh sorry my mind was all over the place when I wrote that comment. Aaaand my grammar’s been alot crappy ever since I stopped interacting with civilization both personally and online. So yeah sorry bout that. Also, English wasn’t my first language so I apologize for the confusing comment.🥺✌🏻
@@FinnianRowland not a problem. I got the main point.
Ah, perfect, a video I can eat my dinner to. Just in time.
Glad I'm not the only one that does that, lol.
Sera and Zelena are great characters, it's obvious that you've spent a fair amount of time on them
I enjoy their flaws quite a bit, Sera doesn't seem to stop and think about what's happened in the past which leads to her misunderstanding with her tribes opinion of her
Zelena just assumes that everyone is going to hate her and while she doesn't actively push people away, she doesn't exactly seek out friends either and I can see that causing problems in her future
I'm really looking forward to the next video about them, I'd definitely read this as a book or even just a fanfiction
10/10, I would be logical if there is a book. I would buy 3 books, 1 to read, 1 to look at, and one to share with my friends.
The one dislike is from Zelena’s childhood bully lol
Last time I was this early, Phyra was still alive
Btw, I absolutely love this. I cannot wait for who the next 2 members are!
Haha I'm glad you like team SRPH so far! The next two members will make their appearances eventually 😊
I'm a minute into the video and I already have the tissues ready.
Edit: Getting the tissues was a good idea
Loved it! The story was well grounded, and also really showed off just how real the characters feel in the world, and I enjoyed all of it. Very well done Phoenix! also to Hoshi Oujo for their amazing art!
I'm really glad you like the story so far!
I can't wait to see how the story unfolds. It's because of stories like this, I'm still involved with the RWBY fandom. I'm even working on 2 OCs of my own.
I'm glad you are enjoying the story of Team SRPH so far 😊
I can't wait until they see my friends in vacuo
The way my chest gets filled with joy everytime you post a video about your OCs.... Love the video so much, and the way you told the story was great! I love them, can't wait for the next chapters!!
I'm so glad you like Sera and Zelena so much and that you are enjoying their story so far 😊
I hope you’re writing all of this down, I’m gonna need this book, as soon as possible.
Haha I definitely have it all written down and backed up in video as well! I'm glad you are enjoying the story 😊
Man, this blows anything I've tried to write up out of the water.
10/10 my dude.
This story already is truly truly amazing I can’t describe how excited I am to find out about the rest of the team about their weapons and semblances, the semblances are my favourite part of anything to do with RWby and yours are so creative
Amazing, this could easily be a full book.
XD this was amazing, I can’t wait for chapter 2 and hearing the last two members of the team! Also, I can’t help but shipping them since there origins, while different, are kinda similar and how they interact is kinda cute
This needs a comic at minimum.
I can tell this will be good
This characters are interesting. I hope you have a friend with animator because if this being fan made animation it will be awesome.
Brilliant story telling, and a brilliant story too. The story between Sera and Zelena was really touching. I can't wait to see how you would introduce 'P' and 'H' into the story.
I look forward to to the introduction of the other two
Please keep this going. I am definitely enjoying the storytelling of your characters and am waiting in anticipation for more!
I definitely will! I have the entirety of "Volume 1" written out already so there is plenty to come. I'm really glad you're enjoying the story so far 😊
I loved this so much, never thought that I'd be so interested in watching you talk about your OCs.
So far Zelena is my favorite she gives off the "Raven" vibe from teen titans and her design reminds me of Kiyohime from Fate GO, I love it.
And so another great tale begins. This is a great story for great OCs. Can’t wait to see more! also, Zelena reminds me a lot of a mix of two of my own RWBY OCs
I'm really glad you are enjoying the story so far! 😊
Can't wait for Chapter 2, hope it will come soon.
Duuude! I think i am now addicted to this story like seriously damn!
They’re red and green...complementary colours. Quite poetic.
i'm seriously hyped right now
Hang on, you didn't have a script in front of you for that whole story? That's really impressive. Of course, some of the lines of the characters could be improved, but all things considered, you did an outstanding job and I am excited to hear more of this story.
Yo, these two characters already have an amazing connection and I LOVE IT!
I’m immediately invested in this story!!! Well done, man!!
Thank you! I'm really glad you are enjoying the story so far 😊
This story seems pretty interesting. In looking forward to future episodes
Can't wait to see the last two members! Or maybe how they managed to resolve their eventual problems.
Either way I love it!
Your storytelling is phenomenal. The more I listen, the clearer the story becomes. Fantastic job, I cannot wait to hear more of this, and meet the rest of team SRPH!
Surprised to see this before we got introduced to the other members of SRPH in their own videos before we got the first chapter, not complaining though
It does seem a bit out of order but Team SRPH doesn't actually get formed until they arrive at Shade Academy and there is a story before that so I figured this would be an interesting way of telling it 😊
Phoenix/Night Definitely. I’m really enjoying everything with team SRPH so far, I can really tell just how much hate work you and all the artist involved have put into this project and I’m excited for more. Keep up the hard work!
AHHH I ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS!!
i cant wait until the next chapters!! honestly,im completely in love with their story so far and im excited to get to know them more!
This is so well written, I can feel the passion you have for these characters is very clear in every word. If it was a book I would totally buy it
This is an excellent story. I admire your creativity
Thank you, I'm really glad you like the story so far! 😊
@@PhoenixNight I look forward to meeting the rest of your team. I'd appreciate it of you went on the RWBY Fandom and gave an opinion on my team when you get the chance. Casper Pendragon, Mable Ambros, Lance Amazon and Tula Cyan are my characters called Team CMLT (Camelot). Feel free to be honest.
you might actually be my favorite youtuber of all time. sure you might not make me laugh as much as other RUclipsrs, but I am always satisfied with the content you make and never disliked a single video by you
I love the story of Team SRPH! Your style of storytelling is very engaging, and the characters are compelling. I hope that you keep going with the series and introduce the other two members of the team at some point.
Your narration was solid. And the story was good. Good enough to probably end up as part of a book. I did like how you went in detail of how in a combat school went. We can't be sure it's the same as it's intended in canon but it honestly passes well enough for a fanfic at least.
I'm glad you think I narrated it well enough! 😊 I felt the added detail in the workings of the combat schools was necessary and since we don't know how it works in canon, I tried to fit it in as logically as I could. If we ever find out the canon procedures then that portion would be adapted accordingly
This story is absolutely amazing! It felt very high quality, and was very enjoyable to listen to. I am so excited to hear more of the story and see the journey of these characters as I grow to love them more and more!
This is so cool! I didn't expect a video series telling their story, I love things like this!
I’ve just got one word to say...AMAZING. Can’t wait for chapter 2.
This is realy some good stuff. The story is easy to follow understand and picture. Thanks to the previous videos telling us abour the chacters im already invested in them and can't wait for the next chapter to come out. Thank you very much for your effort.
I'm really glad you've enjoyed the story and the way that I am telling it so far 😊
I think you did very well with what you put in there
I love it! You’re doing an amazing job developing and expressing these characters. Your story telling skills are very good and both Sera and Zelena feel like great characters that would fit in the RWBY series. Even if they didn’t though I like how they interact with each other and the personal attention you put into their personality and names. Hearing about these two members of team SRPH has even rekindled my desire to make RWBY OC’s and filled me with the motivation to finally get together the long toiled project of Team NIFN. (pronounced Niffen inspired after the residence of Nifelheim) Keep up the excellent work and be proud of yourself you’re doing great! Hopefully I’ll see you and any other lovely being that reads this on discord.
OMG this is amazing 😍. You did an amazing job of telling their story! I look forward to hearing more about their fighting style.
I really hope my characters can have a great story like yours! I can't wait for the next chapter.
You know how you wanna Watch all of a show in a Hour of a day . That's how I feel about team SRPH and My team Aka Team BLCK I'm still making my Oc story but I give you all my support Phoenix!
This was such a heartwarming chapter in their lives so far and i'm glad it's not all angst and trauma. You're really making me want to make my own hunter/huntress of my own and see them interact with others or even make my own team possibly. Looking forward to hearing more and maybe next time have a few notes on hand or practice a script to make it flow as well as it can.
Thank you so much for sharing your ocs with us as well as a backstory so detailed. I love talking about my ocs and their backstories and I love hearing other people talk about their ocs too. It's really inspiring and I can really tell you have passion for them. I definitely love them too and cant wait to hear more!
14:30 The hardest words are usually the most truthfull. Hiding the things you are most ashamed about, but these shamefull moments can only be learning points. To move forward and learn from the scars we bare.
And offcourse I want to hear more Phoenix night, how can I not like stories like these.
I love the storytelling you’re doing! I can see you’ve put a lot of thought into these characters you’ve created and how they interact with each other. Keep going!
Bro this story is starting off amazing I’m so interested to see where these characters go from here. I’m invested and can’t wait for the next update !
I’m so invested into this
Ok, you've got me hooked! I absolutely adore the dynamic between these two, having come from not too dissimilar scenarios. With the way you set them up, I could clearly see them forming a long lasting relationship, and I for one SHIP IT!
Side note: saw your character trailer for Zelena, and I can confidentially say, she is top tier waifu material (her design, semblance, upbringing, all of it) I love her so much, and hope she can become the best version of herself that she can!
" I hope you guys enjoyed the video."
Enjoyed it I freakn loved it.
“She threw herself into battle, Headlong”
Her head just elongates to headbutt foes from afar
Also I love add placement
“Well um- *Have you tried Persil Pro Clean?* “
(Story ends) You're such a tease! Oh well. I'll have to wait 'til next time to hear that story. I'm already loving the dynamic between these two, so I'm excited to see how you turn it on its head.
This is great work! I love the fact that so much detail was poured into this!
Thank you so much! I'm glad you are liking it so far 😊
I really like the story so far. I need to work on my own team, the forth member has been giving me trouble in figuring out her capabilities. She is based off of the phoenix garrisons built during WW2 for D-day.
Epic story telling. Reminds me how I would tell a story. Sarah hating Zelena sends shivers down my spine.
I like this way to give us this story. Very much enjoyed the first chapter and looking forward for two more teammates and the rest of this so far beautiful story!
Yoooo, i love the characters you made
Very good story so far. Know it would probably take some work but was thinking this could look really good animated.
Agreed, I would love to have it animated but the time and effort to do that is way more than I can do. Maybe one day though
This was amazing, cant wait for more
You're very good with storytelling! Excited for more!
Well reading all top comments say a lot about how I feel about chapter one and, can't wait for review of the rest of team SRPH.
Oh! We’re getting a story! That’s so cool!!
Is this a ship now, or is something else going on with Sera looking at Zelena?
Probably
They were nice to each other. Must be a ship.
Or, you know, Zelena is excited to make an actual friend after her horrible experiences in her past.
I wouldn’t call it far fetched
I was a shipping it before they even met.
What would you call the ship I wonder?
I Love this so much this is really good!!!!
I NEED MORE I AM IN LOVE WITH THESE CHARACTERS
This is the type of stuff I love to see. Something that's a bit of a double edged sword is that this gets my own gears turning in my head for what I could do with my own OC's, but I got so lost that it took me over an hour to watch this whole thing. Not necessarily a bad thing, but it's a bit time consuming.
Releasing a chapter 1 before the last two (or confirmed two at least) character trailers was a bit of a bold move. In the whole RWBY culture the trailers are such a big part that it feels weird to suddenly have my head shift from one to the other in a way. A surprise to be sure, but a welcomed one. I could imagine that for now streamlining the story between just the two of them would be the best for starting up a story, being that you won't be opening doors you may not be 100% about and can focus on improving what you have.
I loved the whole thing from start to finish, and given the format you did the best you could without us being here for hours on end. Though with that I would say some things felt like they could have a little more of a rhythm to them. Like when Zelena head back to the academy to get her stuff, I feel like a line if her mumbling to herself out of being exhausted and frustrated at forgetting something so silly would've made the transition feel a bit more authentic. But I understand this is the way you typically talk in your vids, so if this what you're comfortable with, great. Honestly making you put something out that you yourself aren't all there with is something I'd never force you to do.
Any who, keep this up, I can't wait to see what you do next. This seriously is giving me a fix for something I've been missing for a while and am still not sure what to call.
Amazing! This would be awesome in animated form.
That's left (P and H) in Team SRPH
I said it before and I'll say it again I Zelena and Seraphina they deserve each other
Oh, I like where this is going. This is going to be AWESOME!
O POR DIOS!!! MAKE A BOOK OR SOMETHING. And the way you told the story! It war GORGEOUS!!!
I loved every second of it
You wrote an absolutely amazing first chapter, I've been watching your videos on Original Character creation and that along with this has helped me create my own first character. So I want to thank you greatly for the inspiration.
You are very welcome, and thank you for your kind words. I'm really happy you like my characters and their story 😊
@@PhoenixNight any time, I cant wait to see the rest of Team SRPH and where the story goes.
This was honestly very fun to hear. I appreciate your creativity quite a bit.
Great job!
I ship them so much just on the support they will give each other
So anyone else getting psuedo bumblebee vibes from these 2? Also is anyone else already picturing Zelena crying into Sera as she wraps her wings around her?
Well this was just great.
Listen, the writing you've done so far and what you've portrayed and conveyed is excellent. Seeing how you utilized the stoty of Icarus, and then showed that Zelena loved reading about heroes....and then bringing those two concepts later to connect, showing that Sera is just like the heroes Zelena has been reading about...ugh i love stuff like that. And then the multiple levels of connection (similarities) and contrast they have...just nice work man.
Continue writing all this with that level of care and detail and love. And take your time with it. Its soo good already. Keeping working on what you feel needs to sharpen up also.
Right now im just hoping and thinking if there is a way to give Sera the full function of her wings back, like much later on their story.
Also looking forward to the other 2 characters. Very very very much so. And the rest of the story as well.
Keep up the good work man. You're doing fine.
What are you talking about,you are a great storyteller!
I’m more excited for this than volume 8!
dude i can see and feel the emotion you put into these characters, its amazing
I'm so glad that all comes across in the story 😊
@@PhoenixNight i noticed it in the other ones aswell but i didnt wanna say anything
The story was cool and the way you told the story was great, and I can't wait for more!
Honestly this was a very engaging video and I would love to hear more of this story
Yes, this needs a book
I freaking love this!
This gave me vol 1 chapter 2 nostalgia
Great video as usual!
I'm really glad that you are enjoying the story so far! 😊