I find it hard to believe Toby's fireman would just leave his engine behind. Some rewrites I'd make are "Toby's crew had kept his fire going to keep warm" so when toby's fireman came running back, "he jumped into Toby's cab, put him in full reverse and threw the regulator open".
Really really nicely done. Well written and Voice Acted, one of the more disturbing stories I’ve heard not just because of the concept but the execution, those snapping wood sound effects play into the context so so well! Really grand job from everyone here!
I can imagine Toby waking up and finding out it was all a bad dream, he then finds Bertram and maybe some more old engines in and around the old mine. Would've made it a little more sense to me. 😊
Bertram: Is something wrong, Toby? Toby: N-No. Just a bad dream, that's all it was. Bertram: Oh, that's alright. It's good to see this part of the island. **puffs away** Toby: **smiles in relief before setting off to pick up Henrietta**
I can imagine this as a what if scenario- Thomas- …Toby…I-I…I’m sorry… (Hears a voice mutter they took him over and over) Thomas- Driver you hear that? Driver- indeed….Sounds like it’s coming from over here…(walks off with two of the workman.) Driver- …Wait…is that an engine? Betrum- They took him…They took him…They took him… ???- …Damn…Looks like he’s seen some things… Betrum- Pl-please…Get me out of here…They took your friend…It’s only a matter of time before they come for us next. ???- Calm down bud. Will get you to the works and sort all this out later. (Later that week) Skarloey- Hello umm…Bertrum was it? I haven’t made your acquaintance yet I believe. How’s the Skarloey railway been for you so far? Bertrum- …(Doesn’t say anything and leaves with there train of slate.) Duncan- I wouldn’t bother trying. He hasn’t said a word to anyone over the past few days. To be honest looks like he saw something that scarred him…
There should been a scene where the fireman gets scolded for abandoning Toby to his face, as well as Sir Topham Hatt feeling regret for exploring the mine in the first place.... Also, have Bertram explain what had happened...
I could imagine the following as an alternative scenario in Haunted Henry (possibly a rewrite). Sir Topham Hatt: Good afternoon. I hope I wasn't interrupting your rest. Henry: Hello sir. Don't worry about it. Sir Topham Hatt: I want you and Edward to work on the reconstruction of an old station by a pond. Neville and Murdoch can cover your trains on the mainline including the Flying Kipper. Henry: Very well, sir. LATER ON Owl: Coo coo! Henry: Stupid bird! Edward: Whenever that owl hoots, a mist rolls in. And there's a legend that when there's a mist about, there's a ghost about too. Henry: Silence is golden, Edward! Jesus, don't you ever get tired of hearing yourself talking?! Edward: Take care on the old line, youngster. Henry: Yeah whatever! Owls, mists, ghosts - jabberwocky! You're going soft in the boiler. There's no mist. Henry's fireman: What the hell is that? Henry's driver: It's an amber lamp. That means proceed with caution. Indeed we should because it's a pea souper. Henry: Who's there? Henry's driver: Look at that sign. It says; "Danger! Beware of the viaduct." Henry: Weird. Nobody warned us about this before and look! The signal's red, and the gates are closed. Henry's fireman: And there's a fogman's coat! But where the bloody hell is its owner? Henry: G-g-ghosts! Edward was right! Didn't you see that light flicker in the station? Henry's driver: Something funny is happening. I think it's best that we go back. Henry: This is true! Workman: I heard about the viaduct. Thank the Lord you didn't try to cross last night. Henry's driver: Yeah, but we don't know who the hell warned us. Henry's fireman: The viaduct has been repaired, boyo, and that's why we can take our train along the old line tonight again. Henry: I don't want to. Why can't either Neville or Murdoch do my work tonight? I don't mind the smell of fish. I can take the Kipper again. Henry's driver: Murdoch is too heavy for that branch line, and Neville has enough work to do. Owl: Coo coo! Gordon: Beware of the ghost, Henry! Ahahahaha! Trucks: Oh look - Henry's spooked! Muahahaha! Henry: Zip it, you stupid bastards! I'm not scared! Henry's driver: Here we go again. Trucks: Faster, faster! There's a ghost about! The crossing gates closed by themselves and the signal went red! Henry: Stop! Stop! You'll get us all killed! Brakes, driver! Old Bailey: I tried to warn them about that viaduct. Now that silly engine and his trucks are in smithereens. I hope Sir Topham Hatt has a generous insurer! I don't remember noticing a caboose on that train!
*Alternate ending:* Just as the deranged people got closer to Toby. A man in a black/red jumpsuit and mask appeared and whipped out two SMGs. Deadpool: Maximum Effort! **open fires on them** XD
Yeah but that can’t be right, surely Toby would be able to meet Bertram and then things could be better if he had told him about the people in the hills and not kill him, it’s just not possible
But one question remains, besides the obvious "who are the 'People in the Hills'?"; what happened to Toby's fireman? Toby and his Driver were confirmed to be dead, but the Fireman ran past Toby, and into the fog, bloody, but still alive. But the story never mentions him again. Did he survive? Or was he killed elsewhere?
I find it hard to believe Toby's fireman would just leave his engine behind. Some rewrites I'd make are "Toby's crew had kept his fire going to keep warm" so when toby's fireman came running back, "he jumped into Toby's cab, put him in full reverse and threw the regulator open".
Those screams caught me really off guard! Dear titan poor Toby, he never wanted to go there and look what happened to him :(
Really really nicely done. Well written and Voice Acted, one of the more disturbing stories I’ve heard not just because of the concept but the execution, those snapping wood sound effects play into the context so so well!
Really grand job from everyone here!
I can imagine Toby waking up and finding out it was all a bad dream, he then finds Bertram and maybe some more old engines in and around the old mine. Would've made it a little more sense to me. 😊
Whatever helps you sleep at night, pal.
@@tankenginefanaticstudios lol 😆
Bertram: Is something wrong, Toby?
Toby: N-No. Just a bad dream, that's all it was.
Bertram: Oh, that's alright. It's good to see this part of the island. **puffs away**
Toby: **smiles in relief before setting off to pick up Henrietta**
I can imagine this as a what if scenario-
Thomas- …Toby…I-I…I’m sorry…
(Hears a voice mutter they took him over and over)
Thomas- Driver you hear that?
Driver- indeed….Sounds like it’s coming from over here…(walks off with two of the workman.)
Driver- …Wait…is that an engine?
Betrum- They took him…They took him…They took him…
???- …Damn…Looks like he’s seen some things…
Betrum- Pl-please…Get me out of here…They took your friend…It’s only a matter of time before they come for us next.
???- Calm down bud. Will get you to the works and sort all this out later.
(Later that week)
Skarloey- Hello umm…Bertrum was it?
I haven’t made your acquaintance yet I believe. How’s the Skarloey railway been for you so far?
Bertrum- …(Doesn’t say anything and leaves with there train of slate.)
Duncan- I wouldn’t bother trying. He hasn’t said a word to anyone over the past few days. To be honest looks like he saw something that scarred him…
I remember how scary Toby’s Discovery was for me as a child. But this……. HOLY SHIT, DUDES!! Thank goodness the real story never went like this.
Indeed man. Tho your Halloween stories are freaky too.🤪
@@ALCO-C855-fanaye thanks dude! I was really learning how to get scary in later chapters of TTOTM back when I use to do those every Halloween
@@BadRiderAlumni Heh. Though I kinda dislike some of your shippings that doesn't change how funny your stuff is XD.🤪
@@ALCO-C855-fan thanks dude lol
@@BadRiderAlumni you ever introduce Eric to the set?🥺🥺🥺
God, the screams in this were just chilling!
There should been a scene where the fireman gets scolded for abandoning Toby to his face, as well as Sir Topham Hatt feeling regret for exploring the mine in the first place....
Also, have Bertram explain what had happened...
I mean if you were half way to ending up dead your telling me you wouldnt try and escape?
I could imagine the following as an alternative scenario in Haunted Henry (possibly a rewrite).
Sir Topham Hatt: Good afternoon. I hope I wasn't interrupting your rest.
Henry: Hello sir. Don't worry about it.
Sir Topham Hatt: I want you and Edward to work on the reconstruction of an old station by a pond. Neville and Murdoch can cover your trains on the mainline including the Flying Kipper.
Henry: Very well, sir.
LATER ON
Owl: Coo coo!
Henry: Stupid bird!
Edward: Whenever that owl hoots, a mist rolls in. And there's a legend that when there's a mist about, there's a ghost about too.
Henry: Silence is golden, Edward! Jesus, don't you ever get tired of hearing yourself talking?!
Edward: Take care on the old line, youngster.
Henry: Yeah whatever! Owls, mists, ghosts - jabberwocky! You're going soft in the boiler. There's no mist.
Henry's fireman: What the hell is that?
Henry's driver: It's an amber lamp. That means proceed with caution. Indeed we should because it's a pea souper.
Henry: Who's there?
Henry's driver: Look at that sign. It says; "Danger! Beware of the viaduct."
Henry: Weird. Nobody warned us about this before and look! The signal's red, and the gates are closed.
Henry's fireman: And there's a fogman's coat! But where the bloody hell is its owner?
Henry: G-g-ghosts! Edward was right! Didn't you see that light flicker in the station?
Henry's driver: Something funny is happening. I think it's best that we go back.
Henry: This is true!
Workman: I heard about the viaduct. Thank the Lord you didn't try to cross last night.
Henry's driver: Yeah, but we don't know who the hell warned us.
Henry's fireman: The viaduct has been repaired, boyo, and that's why we can take our train along the old line tonight again.
Henry: I don't want to. Why can't either Neville or Murdoch do my work tonight? I don't mind the smell of fish. I can take the Kipper again.
Henry's driver: Murdoch is too heavy for that branch line, and Neville has enough work to do.
Owl: Coo coo!
Gordon: Beware of the ghost, Henry! Ahahahaha!
Trucks: Oh look - Henry's spooked! Muahahaha!
Henry: Zip it, you stupid bastards! I'm not scared!
Henry's driver: Here we go again.
Trucks: Faster, faster! There's a ghost about! The crossing gates closed by themselves and the signal went red!
Henry: Stop! Stop! You'll get us all killed! Brakes, driver!
Old Bailey: I tried to warn them about that viaduct. Now that silly engine and his trucks are in smithereens. I hope Sir Topham Hatt has a generous insurer! I don't remember noticing a caboose on that train!
Damn. That was a great story 👍
Shame about Toby tho. But I'm now really interested in these "People In The Hills".
that was dark but well put together. Voicing for you as always was great.
A plus performance my friend
Someone needs to find that fireman and get some answers damn it!
*Alternate ending:*
Just as the deranged people got closer to Toby. A man in a black/red jumpsuit and mask appeared and whipped out two SMGs.
Deadpool: Maximum Effort! **open fires on them**
XD
Christ that was terrifying, great work!
Gosh that scream two thirds of the way through really was a jump scare. (wearing headphones) Really made me jump / startled.
This is definitely what I call a horror story and close to something in the theme of a like zombie horror movie
I really enjoyed narrating this! 😁
Yeah but that can’t be right, surely Toby would be able to meet Bertram and then things could be better if he had told him about the people in the hills and not kill him, it’s just not possible
But one question remains, besides the obvious "who are the 'People in the Hills'?"; what happened to Toby's fireman? Toby and his Driver were confirmed to be dead, but the Fireman ran past Toby, and into the fog, bloody, but still alive. But the story never mentions him again. Did he survive? Or was he killed elsewhere?
Damn, this is chilling! Great work by the way!👍
Bruh your as talented as 22 tesla and narrow gauge!
11:44 That brakevan would make a great character, just an idea.
Who are these 'people'? Gangsters, Smugglers, Thieves..Cannibals, Cultists, Nomads?
Maybe warriors.
@@stephenhounsell7257 Maybe 🤔
@@stephenhounsell7257Or probably pirates, or vampires and werewolves!!
A great but also a horrific story. But I'm eger to find out more about this. And the People of the Hills
I believe that the castle has something to do with the people in the hills!
This is probably one of the most screwed up Thomas fanmade stories.
Gee whiz Thomas, you should've stayed at the mines instead of Toby!
So, did Toby’s Fireman survive? Did he get killed? Did he bleed out? If he did de, was his body ever found?
He probably did survive, and might have alerted the authorities.
Thomas sounds like Sonic lol
Edit: dang, this is better than the original episode.
Damn… Feel bad for poor Toby having to go through utter torture
Does this mean betrum was also a victim?
Do you create story based off ideas you are give as well as come up with. By that i mean do you accet story ideas
RIP NWR 7 Toby the Tram Engine
Damn, they did Toby very dirty bro
What's the music played at 8:46?
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0:12 What episode was this shot from?
Toby's Discovery.
@@Jetthehawk1994 Thank you, don’t know why I didn’t think it would’ve been from the episode the story was based on.
Toby… no….!!!!
Was there a dark tale behind it?
I'm pretty sure that illegal to do that it kinda reminds of gtw 5629 scrapping
Part 2?
HOW COULD YOU KILL TOBY!?!?!
Series 5(1998)
Narrated by: Alec Baldwin
1973(1880-1947)
100th like!
Toby...is dead? Those monsters!
It's the hills have eyes lame.