Here are some tips for storytelling: make sure your dialogue isn’t bland, the dialogue is supposed to tell the story, you want feeling and emotion. Also, provide more information on the characters. Why does Davin like Jasmine? How did Davin and Jasmine become friends? How did Oscar and Jasmine meet? The characters also need their own distinct personalities. Is Davin flirty and funny? Is Jasmine sweet and naive? Is Oscar unfaithful and cunning? Personality makes the character who they are. Another thing I observed why watching this GLMM is that the characters kept switching viewpoints or personalities. Like Jasmine would get mad when Oscar would hang to other girls, criticize her clothes, and get defensive, yet she doesn’t do anything or care when he when he hangs around other girls. Does she care or does she not care? Oscar also does the same thing. He acts nice with Jasmine and wants to spend time with her on her last day but then he likes to cheat and criticize her. Does he like or not like her? Another thing I want to add is that when you’re making a love story, you want the audience to be enticed. You have to build up the 2 love interest’s relationship. I want to see them slowing falling for each other, or one slowly falling for the other. I want the cute scenes where they do cute things and start to blush. When 2 love interests kiss, I want to be excited! I want to say, “FINALLY! THEY GET TOGETHER!”. Take these tips in mind! ❤️
The title is funny! Imaging being pregnant and then when he or she is born your like- hey! Wanna be besties? The best part BABIES CANT SAY NO 😀 Edit: school sucks 😢 Edit: thanks for the likes I really appreciate it 😊
The fact that while she was buying her stuff and there was a couple behind the cashier and I was paying attention to them then they suddenly broke up- but I'm not really sure if it was a break up tho-
O. M. G. This is the mini movie that I looking for!! I'm trying to do mini movies to!! And I'm not wrong a lot of searching I finally found a super amazing mini movie!! I recommend this, u work hard for it and ur so creative u deserve more subscribers✨✨✨ and also I'm ur new subscriber! And ofc everyone will like it! Cause ur so amazing in editing! 💖
ur FIRSY vid... THIS IS AMAZING GIRLY I LUV IT! your editing is amazing i cant even do that! probly cuz i have a computer with alot of restrictions cuz of school but this is amazing!❤ edit: plus u have a NEW SUUUBBB!!!
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4:29 I loved how those two persons were fighting in the back, it just is a small detail that kinda adds a spark to the story❤
I love this comment❤
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me too@@chrisalexander7022
SAME LOL
They were fighting, no one there was Nosey unlike the people in my country
OMG I have a brother named Davin and somehow all the girls like him yet he only wants to be friends with them 😂❤
Oh realyyy?? I have a best friend named Davin sooo!!
@@Th3GreenMeerkatOOP. Girly what if he sees this
It’s so good !
@@pxmpkin_pie lolll 😂
Omg same
Here are some tips for storytelling: make sure your dialogue isn’t bland, the dialogue is supposed to tell the story, you want feeling and emotion. Also, provide more information on the characters. Why does Davin like Jasmine? How did Davin and Jasmine become friends? How did Oscar and Jasmine meet? The characters also need their own distinct personalities. Is Davin flirty and funny? Is Jasmine sweet and naive? Is Oscar unfaithful and cunning? Personality makes the character who they are. Another thing I observed why watching this GLMM is that the characters kept switching viewpoints or personalities. Like Jasmine would get mad when Oscar would hang to other girls, criticize her clothes, and get defensive, yet she doesn’t do anything or care when he when he hangs around other girls. Does she care or does she not care? Oscar also does the same thing. He acts nice with Jasmine and wants to spend time with her on her last day but then he likes to cheat and criticize her. Does he like or not like her? Another thing I want to add is that when you’re making a love story, you want the audience to be enticed. You have to build up the 2 love interest’s relationship. I want to see them slowing falling for each other, or one slowly falling for the other. I want the cute scenes where they do cute things and start to blush. When 2 love interests kiss, I want to be excited! I want to say, “FINALLY! THEY GET TOGETHER!”. Take these tips in mind! ❤️
Wow your good at writing tips
@@Mochi-xv4zn thanks 😊
Uh this was long
Bro made an essay good tip though 😁👍
@@maggiebubar3392 there was a lot of tips to go through 😅
i love the part when she went to the store an bought flowers the couple or whatever they are is just so good detailed love it
Same
reading the title I was like “wtf why is she pregnant with a teenage man how is she gonna get that out?”
the hell?!?
this is so underrated god dayum
also this was an amazing mini movie !well done!
ermm
@@crocgyudile3660 ?
“How am i supposed to know if you don’t tell me anything about it?!” 5 minutes earlier: “im leaving for a work trip for 2-3 months”
The title is funny! Imaging being pregnant and then when he or she is born your like- hey! Wanna be besties? The best part BABIES CANT SAY NO 😀
Edit: school sucks 😢
Edit: thanks for the likes I really appreciate it 😊
😎Im the baby and I say yahhhhh!
😂😂😂😂😂😂
They can't say yes either 🤣
👁️🫦👁️💀
Literally my first thought when I saw the title-
“ waht a spicy night ” got me died 💀
( 14:20 )
GIRL YOU HAVE TALENT!! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! YOU DEFINITELY EARNED A NEW SUBSCRIBER
Tyysmm !!!
4:07 I'm not even focusing on what they're saying I'm just watching to ppl in the back do their thing .-.
When he Said ‘No wonder your mom left you’ i was like OH DAMNNN BURNN
Lolll
For your first gacha life movie I really enjoyed it I hope you make a another one all the mouth movement were great btw❤
This jasmine girl has so much love for plants that she literally put a sakura tree in her "room".
You can see it in 3:58
Lolll
She even has. Ambush and tree in there
can we just appreciate the work that she does for us??? we should get her to 9000k subs cuz broooo her editing is just too good to see
4:18 Dont worry its just people crying😂
4:32 lol love the background always intristing
4:32 people are crying while jasmine is in a good mood
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Was I the That notice that when she went the the flower shop THERE WERE A BREAK UP IN THE BACK ROUND😂
This is so underrated to be ur first vid, I'm shocked
Tyy !!!!
Never have i seen such a underated glmm
Im a new sub i love your videos ❤❤❤🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉
Keep up the good work!
❤️❤️🌟
Underated this is a amazing
this is so underrated as your first vid😮😮😮😮
Fr it is
𝔼𝕩𝕒𝕔𝕥𝕝𝕪
what
This is soo gud, I hope you keep going with this mind-blowing 🎥
I really love this as your first video i love it so much ❤❤❤❤
4:27, i see that blue head crying 🥲
2:01 WT- his pants and shoes😂😂😂
Not me watching the 2 ppl in the flower shop fighting :'D
i love how when she goes to buy flowers they are breaking up in the bg 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣
lol the people having a argument in the background of the flower shop
Lol this vid is funny and when you say your so childish😂😂😂it got me dying😂😂😂
You did amazing on your first vid I would do really bad on my first video lol please do a part 2 it seems great! Keep it up :)
i loved it!you should def start uploding more!you have great contnent!!! :) ^^ ^.^
Lydia is so iconic 😂😂
lol i liked when the people in the club were like wat a spicy night lol😶🤭
This is so good I love all of your videos I’m a big fan!!❤
OML I LOVED THIS KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK❤
Me seeing the name: 😱😱
As ur first I'm very impressed of how detailed it is
✨️WhAt a SpIcY nIghT✨️😏😂
5:11 the explosion 😩🤌🏻 Perfecto!!
Bro-😂 at 4:25 the girl in the back-I’m dying💀💀
Ty!!
This is probably one of the best videos I've seen today!!
4:30 the fight in the background is all I’m interested in
I love the fact that in back when she went to buy flowers there was bears up 😂
Perfect story line! 😌👍👍👍👍👍👍
The fact that while she was buying her stuff and there was a couple behind the cashier and I was paying attention to them then they suddenly broke up- but I'm not really sure if it was a break up tho-
Well idk, it's also kind of for decoration, so I didn't pay much attention to what I really did
THE THUMBNAIL IS AWESOME AND VIDEO! Idc if its old either
I love it!
I don’t believe this is your first vid it’s so good! And you got a new subbbb
4:12 - 4:36
Not them back there having a fight😂
This was awesome!
i love how when jasmine went to the flower shop the people in the background was yelling at each other it was so funny
"No wonder why your mom left u" got my cryingggg this is so funny!😂
Aww it’s so nice that the blue haired girl moved on😊 13:34
Girl you got talent 😍🎉
GURL THIS IS SOOOO GOOD. IM PRACTICING OVER MINI MOVIES IN YEARS AND I CANT DO SOMETHING AS BEAUTIFUL AS THIS. I’m definitely a new sub.
Awwww tyyy !!! And don't worry, I'm sure that your work is ✨ Amazing ✨
Awh tyyy!! ❤️
@@UrfavAeri you're welcome!!
@@Th3GreenMeerkatcan we have a part 3 rlly soon i hate watching them and not have the final part even tho im late 😭😭
6:14 GOT ME SAYING.. BE AGGRESSIVE B-E AGGRESSIVE.. B-E A-G-G-R-E-S-S-I-V-E
this 1 vid already made my day
4:08 those couples breaking up in the back 💀
Underated man deserves more likes
Her boyfriend doesn’t treat her well enough 😢 8:03
THIS IS UR FIRST TIME IT'S AMAZING
girl you are amazing 😘😘😘
Loved it ❤
Me just watching the drama at the back of the flower shop😂😂
We need a part two please, btw i love it❤
Girl u got new subbb and i am already big fan of ur art and u ❤❤❤❤
new sub 🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩😍😍😍😍😍😍
the detail at 3:56 is amazing :D when the people in the bg were arguing
4:05 THE PEOPLE IN THE BACKGROUND HAVING THEIR OWN MOVIE LOLLL
this was literally so good i will defo be watching ur vids from now onnn
YA YOU DESERVED MORE VIEWERS❤
O. M. G. This is the mini movie that I looking for!! I'm trying to do mini movies to!! And I'm not wrong a lot of searching I finally found a super amazing mini movie!! I recommend this, u work hard for it and ur so creative u deserve more subscribers✨✨✨ and also I'm ur new subscriber! And ofc everyone will like it! Cause ur so amazing in editing! 💖
Tysmmm !!! 💕💞
@@Th3GreenMeerkat Np! Keep it up💞
I love the vid!
4:23 nah the people in the background lol good vid btw
“What a spicy night” had me dying
Bro i was literally say HELL NAH HELL NAH BRO GOT HER A BABY at the end 😂
Omg you just earned u a new sub good job love ur videos!
5:07 that part was hilarious 😂😂
Underrated!❤
Thank youu 😊✨❤️
This was so interesting and it was funny lol
Me at 4:27 Doesn't care about what's happening just looks at the back of the couple fighting
I LOVED HOW AT 4:23 THE PPL WERE FIGHTING
PLEASE MAKE A PART 2 WE NEED IT
bro it’s been 4 years sense i seen a mini gacha life movie
4:30 Me laughing not at jasmine but the two in the back just crying 😭😅
this is a great first gif!
Yay I'm early! Btw these are good tiktoks! (2 hours ago)
I LOVE THIS SMM
The people in the background of the flower shop 🥲
5:10 be like though
@@Cant-handle-it- loll
girl got a whole garden in her house😂
When Jasmine buys the flowers and there's a big breakup in the back 😂😂
ur FIRSY vid... THIS IS AMAZING GIRLY I LUV IT! your editing is amazing i cant even do that!
probly cuz i have a computer with alot of restrictions cuz of school but this is amazing!❤
edit: plus u have a NEW SUUUBBB!!!
4:26 the background people definitely a break up by the crying and shouting 😂
wow this really good for ur first
Amazingg
I'm a new subscriber now this was great!
Amazing part 2
love this vid