I used the 2x speed, and that's fine! I like the ending.... although it was expected. But the whole story remains somber, pessimistic and without a solution.
No one dared challenge the undefeated champion? So like, she beat the last guy and everyone was like, woh, we all quit now? This title is almost as flawed as this story.
Sorry for being very vitriolic. My comments are based in having been a college sciences textbook / lab manual writer who has published on scholarly journals. Thirty plux years ago, I published fiction that was posted in ACTION PURSIIT GAMES ( Paintball ). Do not be too offended; but, this post is really pretty bad. You need a partner / proof-reader who can help you Forge stories of Substance. Keep trying. Re-read the Masters [ Asimov, Heinlein, Saberhagen, etc. ] then Meditate on what they crafted. Print big images of their visages, to post at the top of your writing desk. Then become a Phononic Phoenix .
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This story is to long winded
ok
Not too long, rather just poorly written.
I used the 2x speed, and that's fine! I like the ending.... although it was expected. But the whole story remains somber, pessimistic and without a solution.
Thank you.
No one dared challenge the undefeated champion? So like, she beat the last guy and everyone was like, woh, we all quit now? This title is almost as flawed as this story.
ok, thanks for this
Dont like the place of the tekst .......
Hey, ok, I'll see what I can improve on this, for now, other stories should come out next week, but thanks for the feedback
Sorry for being very vitriolic. My comments are based in having been a college sciences textbook / lab manual writer who has published on scholarly journals. Thirty plux years ago, I published fiction that was posted in ACTION PURSIIT GAMES ( Paintball ). Do not be too offended; but, this post is really pretty bad. You need a partner / proof-reader who can help you Forge stories of Substance. Keep trying. Re-read the Masters [ Asimov, Heinlein, Saberhagen, etc. ] then Meditate on what they crafted. Print big images of their visages, to post at the top of your writing desk. Then become a Phononic Phoenix .