Come Back (Jikook) Sad Oneshoot Part 01
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- Опубликовано: 3 ноя 2024
- This is the part of Jikook Oneshoot come back i hope you all love this Oneshoot of Jikook i have many efforts in this
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6:02 Aww Jimin's face was like a kid 😍😍😭😭😭💜💜💜
WOWWWWWWW........AMAZING m super excited to watch part 02 💖💖💖💖💖💖
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This was so amazing, I can't wait to read next episode😊💗💜thank you💜💜💜💜
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WoW.... LOVE It 💜💜💜 what to see more 😁😁😁😁😁
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Wow it's awesome story I loved it thank u 😍 plz upload next episode
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And YOU have written another winner💎💖🥰🤩😍😘💞
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Amazing I love it can't wait for the next one
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Heartbreaking Loved it Thanks and keep safe
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next please fighting
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Please upload next episode I can't wait
Actually I'm working on another one then I'll upload it
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Please take these as contructive criticism so that you will also have a better story and reading will be more fun.
1. I understand that english is not your native language judging from different grammatical errors; therefore please have someone who knows the language better check on the grammatical construction of the sentences.
2. The transition from one dialog to the next is very slow. Change the transition to at least 10 seconds, it does not have to take 20 seconds to change one short dialog to the next. This makes the storyline a little bit less dragging.
3.keep on improving your story line. I know you can do it. Again, this a constructive criticism coming from someone who loves to read. Thank you.