Overall I liked this, but there were a few things that I think can be improved. - There's a repeated segment early in the story. This comes across as poor quality control. - The Mars colony preparations is dropped in there and then never mentioned again. Setups without payoffs are frustrating and lower the quality of the story. - Building entire ships over the span of three days, with the only explanation the story offers being "because humans smart and determined" feels disruptive and immersion breaking. It make it seem humans are so determined they pulled completely new technologies out of their behinds. A longer timeframe or a bit more foreshadowing than "we have made advancements in antimatter weapons and shields" would have made this much better.
I have to agree with the other statements made. Its a good story but the presentation needs some improvement. Repeated segments and oral presentation are two areas that need improvement
Humanity unifying ? With over 400 languages ,? This story makes Star Trek or Star Wars modern stories seem sane pure Fantasy with a "mary-sue" as the leader
This would be a good story. Unfortunately, the AI reader needs way better annunciation and pronunciation. I'll overlook the repetition of the story which seems to be a universal problem. Debris is pronounced debree , teach your robot hooked on phonics.
Yeah, this computer voice really puts me to sleep, does not matter what story it is, they all the sound the same with this voice. Think I will stick with those who still use humans to tell the story, just can't fake real emotion.
The repetition serves no purpose other than making the story longer without added information. The petty arguments in the UN is typical of humanity, and not unexpected. It took weeks to get to the meeting but only days to return? Story lacks continuity. Good premise, but poorly written.
And all of the preparation achieved in 72 hours (less the time taken gasbagging at the UN)? Ridiculous.
It's always Chen, Sara, Reyes, trepidation, mandible and the same ship names and alien group names
Good story, irritating with the repeat, also rather superfluous. Wasting time with this repeat. Just to take up time. Ridiculous.
The movie "Contact" came to mind right off the bat.
Overall I liked this, but there were a few things that I think can be improved.
- There's a repeated segment early in the story. This comes across as poor quality control.
- The Mars colony preparations is dropped in there and then never mentioned again. Setups without payoffs are frustrating and lower the quality of the story.
- Building entire ships over the span of three days, with the only explanation the story offers being "because humans smart and determined" feels disruptive and immersion breaking. It make it seem humans are so determined they pulled completely new technologies out of their behinds. A longer timeframe or a bit more foreshadowing than "we have made advancements in antimatter weapons and shields" would have made this much better.
Chen again? I’m gone
AI loops @16:00... The "Galactic Alamo" prerogative lives...
I'm beginning to think this Chinese AI.
I guess someone decided to fix the Aricebo dish, because it's in ruins now.
You can tell that the AI doesn’t know English! Rondavis for rendezvous!
I see there’s no capable man left in the future
I have to agree with the other statements made. Its a good story but the presentation needs some improvement. Repeated segments and oral presentation are two areas that need improvement
Humanity unifying ? With over 400 languages ,?
This story makes Star Trek or Star Wars modern stories seem sane
pure Fantasy with a "mary-sue" as the leader
Just like a conveyor belt of AI stories with no quality control. I think I ll stick to paperback. So sad😂
Ilon musk jr. 🤣
It loosy program to repeat large blocks of critical test!
WTF Is with the last name with Chen and petal And Evans change damn last names already
Elon Musk Jr., lol!
This would be a good story. Unfortunately, the AI reader needs way better annunciation and pronunciation. I'll overlook the repetition of the story which seems to be a universal problem. Debris is pronounced debree , teach your robot hooked on phonics.
Yet Another dam Chen
Yeah, this computer voice really puts me to sleep, does not matter what story it is, they all the sound the same with this voice. Think I will stick with those who still use humans to tell the story, just can't fake real emotion.
And who tf is Chen?
A good story line. 4 of 5.
. chen chen chen im out
Dude, why is the captain all ways named chen. What a joke, use a different damn name.
The repetition serves no purpose other than making the story longer without added information.
The petty arguments in the UN is typical of humanity, and not unexpected.
It took weeks to get to the meeting but only days to return? Story lacks continuity.
Good premise, but poorly written.
Quit it with this nonsense of double paragraphs!
PLEASE STOP with the “Chen” characters!
Worst part of the story you had to put Elon Musk in the story I'm not sure which dictator is worse the aliens or musk in the future?