Why in all these stories does the captain always have to be in the middle of everything? Leaving the ship in the middle of battle to board an enemy ship. leaving the ship on landing parties. The captain does not abandon the ship. He stays at his post to command the ship.
Though I love the original series for nostalgia sake, Kirk always being on away missions is a major critisism of the chain of command on the Enterprise, but TV gotta TV.
I can't stand a story that doesn't maintain the plot line...."Zack" is on the ground fighting beside Ivorian warriors, then he is in his command chair ramming the mother ship....SMDH
Thers too manyholes in this story that don't make since, some mentioned by others. The one that really strikes me is that the Captain was willing to risk everything to save the civilians, bringing them to his ship, and in the next instance he was wiiling to kill them all raming his ship into the enemies. That doesn't make any since at all.
how the fu#k did he come back too the ship? He is a captian of his ship is leading the marines and he can teleport. I know it is scifi but come on that is stupid.
The people that write these stories -- OR the people that created this AI -- need to learn how the military actually works. Others have already pointed out how the "Captain" would not -- indeed, COULD NOT -- leave the bridge of the ship, so I'll just add . . . NO EXCLAMATION POINTS! No one who gets that excited would EVER be made "Captain." The Captain IS "the calm in ths torm." The Captain ALWAYS "knows what to do." The very BEHAVIOR of the Captain, under fire, is what holds the crew, company, battlion together, calmly doing their duty. The utterances of the Captain, would not be followed by exlamation points. The Captain is never "excited," he/she is the center of calm. He also DOESN'T explain his orders, he just issues them. The crew trust in his orders, because the Captain "knows what to do." And he doesn't address the crew . . . by their first names.
Why the F is the captain of the ship leading a rescue party down to the planet in the middle of a space fight? His job is makeing sure that there'll be a ship to evacuate the people.
Not sure where you're based (I live in NZ) and you can guarantee that every weekend YT ramps up the number of ads. E.g. halfway through a 20 min video, I had already seen ads that totalled more than the actual video plus they even threw in a 30+ min ad towards the end.
Well that didn’t work. If it was a lot longer it could do, but that was too much crammed in at once. If you sit down to write 2000 words and it finishes at 8000 that’s fine. :)
if you are going to continue to make these stories.. at least stop having the captain leading boarding parties all the fucking time.. Captains of ships do not lead boarding parties !
@@Redmeer411 then it shouldn't be hard at all to do better instead of just complaining. AI is trainable/programmable. So if it isn't up to par for them they can go and do it themselves in a way they like.
@@michaelturner3922 How is training an AI going to fix the garbage it's already produced and put up for consumption and monetization on RUclips? Lol your argument is asinine if you produce and make your product available to the public then people have the right to give judgement. The op and I am not the one putting up unedited and poorly written AI generated slop for profit and for others to consume so the responsibility of producing a quality product isn't mine or any of the audience, it's the responsibility of the one pushing it as a finished product especially when it's for profit. So maybe the poster should train their ai better or do the bare minimum amount of effort of proof reading and editing the end product to be of better quality other wise what's the point of this channel?
@@michaelturner3922 Yeah that's an asinine argument if I have ever heard one. Get out of here with your logical fallacy. You go around telling people that if they don't like a product they buy at a store they need to go learn how to make their own products? This is no different from that. The OP is not the one producing and putting up AI generated slop on RUclips and marketing it as a finished story for profit like this channel owner did. If you produce a product and put it to the public for consumption then the ones who consume it hold the right to render judgement on its quality. If its good then they can say that and if its bad they can also say that. The burden of quality is not on the audience and consumer its on the creator and proprietor of the product to ensure they are making a quality product. The OP has the right to point out the unedited nearly incoherent "story" is bad. If you like it then bully for you there's no accounting for taste, but its objectively a poorly written piece that the producer couldn't even be bothered to take the time and minimum amount of effort to proofread or edit the end product to remove the glaring contrivances and plot holes to make the story make sense. I personally don't believe that praising bad work when its objectively bad, just because I didn't do the work myself, does anything other than encourage more bad work.
I missed the part where Zach cured cancer, saved a bus full of Nuns and walked on water to save a drowning puppy 🤣
I"m glad I swallowed my coffee before I got to this comment.
I'm sure that would be in the next chapter....
Just Saying!!!
A ship captain does not have the training to be amongst a tac team in a spcop
Dude... its fiction. THATS what you have a problem with?
An excellent story of what humanity could become.
Why in all these stories does the captain always have to be in the middle of everything? Leaving the ship in the middle of battle to board an enemy ship. leaving the ship on landing parties. The captain does not abandon the ship. He stays at his post to command the ship.
Since when do ship commanders go on combat missions? That is why they delegate to other lower ranking officers & non-commissioned officers.
Kirk did all the time
Star Trek has always been weird about that. At least Picard was better about letting his first officer do it.
Though I love the original series for nostalgia sake, Kirk always being on away missions is a major critisism of the chain of command on the Enterprise, but TV gotta TV.
So, how did Zack get from ground defense with the Ivorians to the bridge of his ship?
PFM
TARDIS?? Or Scotty beamed him up..lol
By using good old fashioned A.I. inconsistencys! You would be amazed at how far that can take you.
@zacharyr666 all that timey wimey fuzzy stuff...
I can't stand a story that doesn't maintain the plot line...."Zack" is on the ground fighting beside Ivorian warriors, then he is in his command chair ramming the mother ship....SMDH
True... I was thinking just that...
The other thing I don’t like is how a ship commander is doing everything and leaving the command of their ship.
@@jorgegallegos3888 IKR?
Then you have all missed the core message. Bravery, Compassion and Self Sacrifice is the real message not story continuity or where a character was.
I thought I missed something during an ad. Thanks for pointing that out.
I very much enjoyed this tale, it's a good yarn.
Uuuuuhhhhh, just when exactly did Zach arrive back on the bridge of the Valiant?
Thers too manyholes in this story that don't make since, some mentioned by others. The one that really strikes me is that the Captain was willing to risk everything to save the civilians, bringing them to his ship, and in the next instance he was wiiling to kill them all raming his ship into the enemies. That doesn't make any since at all.
The Valiant if full of refugees yet he collides with that Mothership?
How about Zac was on the ground with the Marines, then all of the sudden he was on his ship, like magic.
damn those zorgons get around!
Realllly! "ZORGANS" Again !?? No danger of imagination here.
A fan of "TBBT" I bet!
A decent story in search of a Proof Reader and Editor.
Love. These stories so much thank you
The Timer counted down, yet he triggered it manually?
yes that's right
Obviously the timer lets you know when it's safe to trigger it manually lol
Worst automated stories ever. An AI unworthy.
Eighty Eight.... or is it 88...either way, love the stories....HFY Sci-Fi!
FK ing Zorgons again no matter how many times you eliminate the emperor and destroy the empire they're back next week, same time, same channel!
how the fu#k did he come back too the ship? He is a captian of his ship is leading the marines and he can teleport.
I know it is scifi but come on that is stupid.
the plot holes are pretty big. yeh
Escape pod
And don't forget about consoles exploding. The author is heavily influenced by Hollwood BS
Reverse escape pod?
Is the picture of Captain Synder or a zorgan or perhaps an Avorian
I've started to listen to the stories. It started with the one "Humans are Space Orcs. " love the story & hope to hear more.
I kinda like the "humans are unexpected badasses" stories though.
I enjoyed the story. Idk why so much hate for it in the comments.
🙏🏻❤🙏🏻❤🙏🏻❤888🙏🏻❤🙏🏻❤🙏🏻❤If only this were true in the real world😢
The people that write these stories -- OR the people that created this AI -- need to learn how the military actually works. Others have already pointed out how the "Captain" would not -- indeed, COULD NOT -- leave the bridge of the ship, so I'll just add . . . NO EXCLAMATION POINTS! No one who gets that excited would EVER be made "Captain."
The Captain IS "the calm in ths torm." The Captain ALWAYS "knows what to do." The very BEHAVIOR of the Captain, under fire, is what holds the crew, company, battlion together, calmly doing their duty. The utterances of the Captain, would not be followed by exlamation points. The Captain is never "excited," he/she is the center of calm.
He also DOESN'T explain his orders, he just issues them. The crew trust in his orders, because the Captain "knows what to do."
And he doesn't address the crew . . . by their first names.
Great story eighty eight
And WHERE exactly did the soot come from as electric fires don't usually produce soot?
Why the F is the captain of the ship leading a rescue party down to the planet in the middle of a space fight? His job is makeing sure that there'll be a ship to evacuate the people.
Yeah and the captain will be back next week too
4000 quatloo's the humans cannot be contained!
I'll see your 4000 quatloos and raise you another 4000!!!!!
You need to seriously work on your writing, maybe get someone to proofread your work before recording it.
I'm looking forward to further chapters. Some of the cliffhangers are promising.
7 minutes in and it has already shown me 5 ads...come on RUclips, do better.
This is how channels make money.
Not sure where you're based (I live in NZ) and you can guarantee that every weekend YT ramps up the number of ads. E.g. halfway through a 20 min video, I had already seen ads that totalled more than the actual video plus they even threw in a 30+ min ad towards the end.
This made me cry
88 loved the story
First the aliens are evorians then they are Ivorians then back to evorians?!? Make up your mind!!!
I’m so sick of hearing the word zorgon
Very good 😊
Chat GPT authored?
This an AI writer? Way too many inconsistencies
Well that didn’t work. If it was a lot longer it could do, but that was too much crammed in at once. If you sit down to write 2000 words and it finishes at 8000 that’s fine. :)
Written by an AI.
Its paw patrol.....
This is inconsistent, badly written rubbish. Can’t even be bothered to finish it.
Are this an AI made up story??
How the hell are you supposed to follow these stories in order? Frustrating!
This was written by a eight year old.
And yet you've never written anything that could compete with it.
An eight year old*
Or by an AI?
More like a 2 year old A.I.
88 Great story!
88 ate T ate 😁
Cool concept but unfortunately very bland writing
88 i absolutely love your stories, most of them could be a book, think of it.
69th comment 🎊🎉
if you are going to continue to make these stories.. at least stop having the captain leading boarding parties all the fucking time.. Captains of ships do not lead boarding parties !
bad writing.
Do better then.... 😂
It's AI generated.
@@Redmeer411 then it shouldn't be hard at all to do better instead of just complaining. AI is trainable/programmable. So if it isn't up to par for them they can go and do it themselves in a way they like.
@@michaelturner3922 How is training an AI going to fix the garbage it's already produced and put up for consumption and monetization on RUclips? Lol your argument is asinine if you produce and make your product available to the public then people have the right to give judgement. The op and I am not the one putting up unedited and poorly written AI generated slop for profit and for others to consume so the responsibility of producing a quality product isn't mine or any of the audience, it's the responsibility of the one pushing it as a finished product especially when it's for profit. So maybe the poster should train their ai better or do the bare minimum amount of effort of proof reading and editing the end product to be of better quality other wise what's the point of this channel?
@@michaelturner3922 Yeah that's an asinine argument if I have ever heard one. Get out of here with your logical fallacy. You go around telling people that if they don't like a product they buy at a store they need to go learn how to make their own products? This is no different from that. The OP is not the one producing and putting up AI generated slop on RUclips and marketing it as a finished story for profit like this channel owner did. If you produce a product and put it to the public for consumption then the ones who consume it hold the right to render judgement on its quality. If its good then they can say that and if its bad they can also say that. The burden of quality is not on the audience and consumer its on the creator and proprietor of the product to ensure they are making a quality product. The OP has the right to point out the unedited nearly incoherent "story" is bad. If you like it then bully for you there's no accounting for taste, but its objectively a poorly written piece that the producer couldn't even be bothered to take the time and minimum amount of effort to proofread or edit the end product to remove the glaring contrivances and plot holes to make the story make sense. I personally don't believe that praising bad work when its objectively bad, just because I didn't do the work myself, does anything other than encourage more bad work.