No one going to mention he was away for 14 months? Not even a tour of duty is that long, and its a oil rig in the USA, come on. Thats BS. And the daughter is ringing him instead of her mother. If he was not coming home because of an issue, who would have gone to the hospital to deal with kyle? And how the hell can his kid live with him if hes away for 14 months on an ail rig in a the sea? Jesus. Pay attention to story lines. This is trash
too much back story not enough actual story. Why should I care that the protagonist was an oil rig worker? Where's the hook? I have a lot of other options, I'm not gonna waste my time on a story that doesn't catch my interests within the first thirty seconds. Work on your story telling technique.
Very smooth transition. Glad Emily will stay with you. Congratulations on your nuptials and new job. 🎉
misleading thumbnail, nothing of that happen on this story. 👎
No one going to mention he was away for 14 months? Not even a tour of duty is that long, and its a oil rig in the USA, come on. Thats BS. And the daughter is ringing him instead of her mother. If he was not coming home because of an issue, who would have gone to the hospital to deal with kyle? And how the hell can his kid live with him if hes away for 14 months on an ail rig in a the sea? Jesus. Pay attention to story lines. This is trash
LOL, maybe the oil rig has a secret teleportation device so he can pop in and out when the story needs him. Makes total sense!
too much back story not enough actual story. Why should I care that the protagonist was an oil rig worker? Where's the hook? I have a lot of other options, I'm not gonna waste my time on a story that doesn't catch my interests within the first thirty seconds. Work on your story telling technique.
Once again bait and switch
I'm sick and tired of stories not matching thumbnails get ur shit together
What horseshit